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I understand still when you did not explained the battle at the capital well enugh you rushed things like there were no soldiers on the side stahl calling for regroup to reinforce the whole made by the mage. also, the way you ended the battle is rushed and you didn't explain what happened to the defeated armies of both kingdoms were they enslaved to rebuild the destroyed cities of the west that the Luak army destroyed and also to rebuild the damaged whole of the capital or was they just massacred even so they were defeated its still waste of human resources to kill them all when your goal as king to rebuild your kingdom and on later chapters the king henry was wise enough to spare the parties so he can use there knowledge so what happened in the aftermath of the battle???
no rewarding land no wealth dame mc is on exploiting mood
okay like the Prussians if am not mistaking okay nice
Luther didn't kill the king why did he choose to spare Alonso and then kill him you keep rushing things it's like writing about the king and the political side of the story is quite annoying so you just kill him same with the noble structure writing about aristocracy gonna take a long time so let's just abolish it one more thing if I remember correctly story is based on a continent twice as big as the tow Americans continent you have countless empires and kingdoms different species and races occupy those nations they also have etiquette and nobility structures how is henry gonna deal with them if henry and his followers don't have nobility in court since etc etc
every time he loses something earlier you wrote that he lost both his arms now he lost legs and one arm
yet he want to abolish noblity
why
only in the capital
you keep rushing things what about the mage luna what kind of discussions do both have about the mage of the Kost family why did he come to these lands what was his objective was he the one who told the barbarian to attack Stahl or is he a minion of some organization what about the treasure what about Zuna what happened to her what about the king of Aritreia Alonso what happen to him did they make a deal. what happened to Duke Latter did he manage to escape there are too many loose ends you keep skipping so many things it gets annoying it's like disrespecting the reader's intellect author I told you before to take your time and not rush things your story has the potential don't ruin it by rushing and I really like your novel that's why I wrote all that
embrace the darkness
what about the seal in the cursed woods