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WhiteWarlock4mthCommentedThe grammar is going to kill me...But Im still reading until the story stops being entertaining.
I said as I feel lonely and disappointed how the game will end. The game where everyone can do anything and decided everuthing. A game where the player been given a freedom to do as they pleased.- WhiteWarlock4mthCommented
You could put this through chat got to check for corrections or simply ask it to improve grammar and sentence structure, and revise a bit more from there.
He said with a chuckle as we started chatting as I can heared that [Monochrome_God] is yawning. - WhiteWarlock4mthCommented
o of. The Grammar....At least use a grammar checking software like Grammarly, its absolutely free. If not, stiff like word or google docs has some minor grammer checking capabilities. The story premise is so good, but the grammar is killing it. Please author, if you could, use some grammar checking software.
"Long time not see too, [Monochrome_God]. It's been about three years, hasn't it?" I greeted him back. - WhiteWarlock6mthCommented
Amazing, keep it up!
And give me a review! It's the least you can do! - WhiteWarlock6mthCommented
Que?
"~and more respectful~" Gojo ruffled Robin's hair before walking past them - WhiteWarlock6mthCommentedThis paragraph has been deleted.
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Common?
[Grade: Common] - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
A force...intetesting.
he taunted me as he rushed to me once again. but now he compensates his strength by utilizing an unknown force that creates 'compressed air' that buffers his attacks and limits my movement. - WhiteWarlock7mthCommentedTang Li Xue slapped the back of Elder Lin's head hard with her [Bad Luck Sticker] made it stuck on Elder Lin's back head!
- WhiteWarlock7mthCommented"But my scroll shows that… wait what did you just call me?!"
- WhiteWarlock7mthCommented'It seems he wasn't trying to trick me,' thought Su Wan.
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Cheng Cheng? whats that supposed to mean?
F-Class hero Slime, E-Class hero Lizardman, D-class hero Frost Goblin, Chengcheng. - WhiteWarlock7mthReplied to Bardok32123
Yep same
"It was a shame how he carried on🎵." - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
Question: can ghosts canonically do that? Heal someone besides their guardian I mean. I thought a ghost was bound to their guardian and could not use their paracausal energy on others but only the guardian they are connected to.
He held up a hand and a little… Thingy blurred to life, its sides spinning slowly as its light-bulb face lit up. She flinched, surprised at the sudden brightness, and it spoke, voice calm and soothing, "Don't worry, little one. I'm not going to hurt you." - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
"accept it", not "do it"
The other concubines at home naturally wouldn't do it. - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
"they, not "he"
Therefore, he had no choice. - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
You want tickets? Tips? Get a better translator and proof checker, then we might start paying. Seriously, In not going to bitch about the translation since its not like I could translate this myself, but is it so hard to read what you translated and meaby have someone else take a look? The he and she pronouns being miced up is annoying but tolerable, but that "the other, the other, the other..." was just stupid. How does one not notice that kind of mistake. Did you just mtl this, copy paste it here, and not bother to check it? Get something like grammarly to spell and grammar check at least, some of the idioms might be seen as wrong, but just don't correct those. It would really improve the quality of the story if you got a grammar/spell check app.
P.S. Matchday show, asking for tips, monthly tickets, recommendation tickets! - WhiteWarlock7mthCommented
wut...?
This was really a heifer taking a plane. - WhiteWarlock8mthCommented
Bites ze Dusto!
As soon as Xiao Shi finished speaking, a sharp light flashed in his eyes. He shouted in his heart. Explode!