Then, 2, and basically my final point; What happened with the doors? That was the main focus, not a cat. I understand that you might want to write about a more slow decline or something, but... The doors are the most interesting part of this. The cats being an introduction and Kiara getting sick is fine, no fundamental problem, but you didn't set-up an entire scene for the cats being a thing; You did for the doors with the key chain and the grand-parents. Don't misunderstand me, grammar- As you've clearly stated- Is an important thing for me, but its fixable and mostly trained by just writing things and seeing if they're correct. But the doors should be the most important and overlooming part of the story, not the cats, all you'd have to do is simple; Let him stumble upon a small door in some dusty corner, let his go ask his mom about it, then when she doesn't know about it, bring her over. But the door is gone, strange, even stranger being the weird nervous laugh from his mother as she tried to change the subject. Easy, no hard dialogue, a hook for the story; 'What are the doors? What does the mother know?'. Who knows, maybe you can even let Trish doubt himself or think that he'd use one of the keys if he sees something like it again as an excuse for him having it on him at all times. The real, only, crucial problem I have, is that you're not using the most of the mysterious grand-parents and the key-chain. Trish forgetting it is normal, just use it as an excuse in the next chapter if you're too lazy to rewrite it all- I would be- Let him remember it when he sees a weird door. Horror, the kind that wriggles in your skin long after you're done reading, is not a bunch of jumpscares. This is something that you should remember, so, use the doors. Moral of the story: USE THE DOORS. The idea is great, but it doesn't matter if you don't use it.

Bro read a joke and wrote an entire corporate apology, it's not that serious. Write what you want, perfect your craft, and most importantly; laugh, mostly at dumb comments. -This is mauritany, and I support this message.

Do your worst, if you want me to suffer, then you'd better start writing better. Yea, I said it. Who even needs to learn for more than a week before a test? Couldn't be me. I expect every single one of them to die, let 'Her' pop up and kill the cat in front of Kiara so that she commits sudoku. Oh, and I didn't expect you were following the true way of the writer, I recommend fentanyl.

So they got scammed, and that's why they're in debt? ...If the mom is the one that got scammed, then my theory gains validity.

That clue being a revolver?

Do you even know what their number is? Do you have a clue what their name even is? Do you have any clue how dangerous it could be to use the land line of some house that has doors that don't exist?

What if, hear me out, she's already dead. Kind of like a cordyceps, she's been put under control and made some debts in order to lure in her prey. Doesn't the talk about the doors seem like perfect bait for Trish?

Best you'll get is a 'What a shame'

Don't do it Trish, don't you know your old man is in there as well?

Okay... Trish, I recommend trying to find either a box of matches or a gun, both shouldn't be that hard to find considering your grand parents lived in the middle of the woods, probably without electricity, In the elden years.

Because... The grand parents aren't real, the mother and uncle were born from the house's flesh to experience the world for it, first it took the brother, now it would take the sister and her offspring.

Magic is in our blood Trish, we are the gagaki clan, and our sorcerer ancestor once stood at the pinnacle, but was betrayed by his best friend; leaving only the one meme behind before he died.

...He was a good man, but ever since he found the legacy of Gege... Lobotomy kaisen got to him, Trish, it was sealed for a reason. It has always been our family's responsibility to protect the world from the return of the king of frauds, you too will take up the mantle, do not get curious and look into the abyss.We do not want to lose another, just like your uncle.

Obviously, comes from the bloodline.

With what? A rocket ship? Kiara, isn't it obvious that our tires have already been cut? We're screwed, the only escape is the noose. Which I just so happen to have and am willing to sell to you for 20 bucks.

Amazing! That cat must've been the god of freedom, keep going, and maybe use your new unbridled spirit to do some actual insults this time instead of insinuations.

Yea, the thing used for communication, what of it?

Of course not, we're not the people who wasted all our money on cush. What he probably sees:

The internet cares only for death.

Who is 'She', well, let's find out on this episode of trauma theory. New lore has dropped today and it has been shown that 'She' has been mentioned by both one of the parents and Trish. It seems she is barely remembered, the sister of Trish the loser and also the favourite child. From what we've seen the parents have spent most of their time without either Kiara or Trish, but why? Well dear viewers, I think I've found the answer. What if, Trish had an elder sister but she was wiped anti-memetic scp style? She was the favourate child, leading to the other two childer being ignored, and maybe she was also the reason for the debt. Think this: A bunch of money was put into your daughter's tuition or something and you could no longer remember her nor what the debt was really for, neither can the debtors, so all the government support for college tuition isn't applied. Come for more 200 iq theories soon!