Interesante, pero sentí que se parecía demasiado a un fanfic sobre un profesor de runas antiguas en Harry Potter, es como leer lo mismo pero con algunas palabras cambiadas, querer ser profesor, pero no poder porque fue considerado demasiado joven, luego de unos años es aceptado y por alguna razón es capaz de hacer con runas cosas dudosas o poco coherentes.

Al leer este capítulo no lo encontre triste o emotivo, solo me causo molestia, porque ya es la segunda vez que sucede esta despedida. Me preocupa que vuelva a suceder varias veces, como esas telenovelas de baja calidad.

Me encanta, podría dar muchas razones, pero simplemente se adapta a mi gusto, me alegra que alguien comentara a traducirlo, me había dado por vencido cuando lo encontre en mtl, por favor no lo dejes en pausa. xD

... sentí como si estuviera leyendo una novela wuxia, con tipos más poderosos que el protagonista apareciendo como si fueran mala hierba o piedras al lado del camino, se siente muy poco realista y desagradable estos intentos de darle emoción o drama a la historia, olvidando por completo el tiempo y lugar. Esta historia no merece mi esfuerzo por escribir esto en ingles, enserio, no es la mejor o peor novela, pero esos agregados molestos simplemente me hace perder las ganas de leer...

Odio cuando los autores fuerzan escenas en los fanfic de one piece, solo para darle cicatrices al protagonista. En la última pelea podría matarlos fácilmente, pero se puso arrogante y terminó herido, lo peor es que no parece reflexionar sobre esto. Escribiría esto en ingles, pero estoy tan molesto que no tengo ganas.

It's a shame the author doesn't include the ninth generation, because Greavard would be a better choice.

The story is interesting so far, but the recent chapters are annoying, the protagonist let that thief escape despite being able to capture him, then he meets an injured stranger, after several questionable, irrational or absurd things he decides to protect him. The protagonist doesn't know why this person is hurt, he doesn't know who hurt him, but he doesn't question anything just because in those few minutes that the guy was awake he gave the impression of being someone respectable.

Not having heroin is stupid. It makes the protagonist seem less human. Pokémon cannot give you the same company as someone of your species. The problem with most authors is that they add the heroine too early in the story and readers end up finding her intervention in the plot unpleasant. That's why many readers end up preferring that there not be a heroine. What bothers me is that the protagonist runs a place where he pairs Pokémon, probably interacts with pairs of trainers, and that he remains a unmarried dog for more than 1000 chapters just because that logic is frustrating. There's no point in me complaining to a translator, but I had to vent

Honestly, I'm a little upset, there hardly seems to be any decent Pokémon fanfic, the vast majority are full of darkness. When I was looking to read Pokémon fanfic I was expecting something more similar to an anime or game, with adventures, defeating villains, catching Pokémon and improving together. If I wanted to read dark or sad fanfiction I would go look for other series with zombies, war or even Final Fantasy.

Your story is fine, but it's too common, most Pokemon fanfics try to show the worst of that world, it's surprising how much dirt they throw at the series, the authors seem to deliberately ignore what makes it popular world, they seem to focus a lot on the manga and the flaws or plot holes. The worst thing is that most of these fanfics are among the most popular and it makes me wonder if the majority of readers have a bad taste for trauma or are simply masochists.

The first volume started off badly, your choices weren't very appealing and the details of the world you created weren't good either, using the flaws of the original story as the basis for your world wasn't smart. (I mean Ash's age) But then I saw how your story improved with each chapter, you made good use of the pokemon, objects and events to make it something interesting and enjoyable. But with the second volume she was a bit annoying again, the time skip took away a bit of her charm, you started a pokemon farm and crops, but you skipped acquiring new species, what happened with Giovanni didn't seem very realistic, like leader of an organization I am surprised that he appeared alone, at least there should be some subordinates acting as extras in the background. But the most irrational thing is that you give too much to a secondary character and the protagonist is left with nothing.

the choice of starter pokemon killed 40% of my enthusiasm for reading this, but I'm bored and I'll give it a chance.

a level 14 gyarados? Is it a hack rom or did you use cheat.

I was looking for something with more content, it feels a bit rushed, it seems more like a guide or gameplay and not a real world. The journey through the viridian forest is very simple, you just walk, you fight some trainers, the pokemon you wanted appeared and you left the forest... maybe you'll read it when you want to kill time.

It is interesting that he chose Bulbasaur, but the reason why he did it is not very good, Kanto has many forests and lakes, in the anime locations were shown where to find the starters, the only exception was Charmander who was only found just by luck. For all these things you should consider that finding fire type pokemon is difficult or impossible before the second gym, you may have your reasons such as having prepared an encounter with one, but the protagonist at that moment would not know it. It's a good story and I'll take the protagonist's comments as part of his inexperience or something similar.

Beedrill does not learn fire type attacks, the move "Sunny Day" is the only one it can learn of this type, you should at least consider the types (elements) that present the moves you can learn and use it as a base, before you start adding content about their moves or powers that you invented. The world you presented is interesting, but don't be influenced by those hackroms, most of these have content that strays too far from canon, some seem good to me, like Pokemon Elite Redux that adds interesting and relatively reasonable things, such as abilities and innate. I say all this because it seems that you are exaggerating with the type changes you made to the electroweb movement.

Writing Quality 3-4 ☆ Update Stability 5 ☆ Story Development 4 ☆ Character Design 3-4 ☆ world background 4 ☆ The story started well, it is interesting how it united the various pokemon worlds into one, in the first chapters there were too many time jumps, but this was good to give us a little information about this new world, avoiding information dumps and the filled with what the protagonist experienced in his first 10 years of life. After chapter 70, certain annoying things became more visible, such as: the failed attempts at jokes in dangerous situations, the random way in which the protagonist acts, speaks or thinks, this was especially unpleasant because it gave him a feeling of madness and inconsistency with respect to his background. I also felt the lack or scarcity of interaction between Pokémon and their trainers, most of the time the plot is more related to the battles. One of the things I appreciate is that although it has realistic or tragic elements, it does not focus on this aspect unlike most pokemon fanfiction. Finally, the author got too carried away with the possibilities of aura, I came here for pokemon, I didn't come for things like dragon ball, JJK, one piece and naruto, lately I feel that the story seems messy or with a lot of unnecessary content. It's just my opinion, the story is not the best you could hope to read, but it is still interesting and from chapter 1 to 85 I had no desire to stop reading.

too many annoying references, these affect too much the personality of the protagonist and the flow of the story. In several chapters you added comical things, but they were not funny, they were strange because the moment was not right and this is something that you usually repeat in many serious or dangerous situations. The protagonist's conversations with his friends are annoying, because when they ask about something or he meets one of them, he always resorts to performing poor quality dramatic performances, as if he were a clown or comedian, I have no problem with him doing it. from time to time with some friends, but you use it too much and I feel that the original personality of the protagonist that I liked is being lost.

I just have one request to make to you, don't add too many weird things, Ash is an aura guardian, he is not an avatar or a pokemon that can manipulate multiple types (elements). I say these things because I don't make sense that I could manipulate electricity and shape it into an bow...

don't make it too complicated, just use the game features like system skills, view status, IV, EV, Nature, skills, stats for contests (toughness, beauty, etc.), moves learned, which You can learn and egg movements. Maybe also the DexNav (optional). A backpack with infinite space, the latter already has it, as long as you don't add a gacha, shop or missions there is no problem.