Meharu

Dont matter it proves that sharingan can do time space stuff i gave it as an example

Real huge ey

I deleted previous comment btw

I know Boruto before Blue Vortex had its issues, and there weren’t many standout moments. But your concept looks genuinely fun, so I wanted to share some constructive criticism to help strengthen it. Like conversation endings it improved after a few chaps but it still dont feel too natural

Oh And when I talk about the “story,” I don’t mean the overall concept. I mean the way it’s handled. Since it’s based on Boruto, it feels somewhat restricted, like there are limits on what you can and can’t do. The original Boruto characters sometimes feel a bit off or unnatural, which makes parts of the story feel slightly strange.

It’s not hate, just constructive criticism. The storytelling feels complicated. When reading it, I often have to pause to understand what’s happening. The conversations also tend to end in a repetitive way, like “Indra said that” or “Indra felt,” which makes the dialogue feel less natural. The descriptions are sometimes overexplained as well, which slows down the pacing. The reason I gave this a low rating was to get your attention. I genuinely like the premise, but I feel these parts could be improved. As someone who reads a lot, those details are what caught my interest and made me want say ill update my reciew btw after this🫡

Senior brother, I have just moved from the servant quarters to the outer sect as a disciple. I have not yet received a name from my master. Before joining the sect, my name was Mert.

Nice

Senior brother you are too polite i only have 600 and just recently moved from servant quarters to outer sect

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