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Too much fight sequence and it's stretched too damm long . like every fight id 4-5 chapter long . it's just like padding words and almost no substance in it and wastes too much time in nonsense.
same as ch 12
same chapter as ch 7
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It is Japan instead of Neon. Common in Chinese novels.
I think this story has potential in it . Sometimes some things seems nonsensical but later just fit in . I encourage the author to continue writing it as it is enjoyable and a new take on DD-2 fanfiction that I have seen so far.
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like for example the "GREEN LIGHT DOULUO" present in the webnovel itself which in my opinion seriously lack smut scenes