I also googled it. It realy is ugly 😂

jo, the lightning succs

1. There are a lot of myths about western dragons with power like: creating a Storm with one flap of the wings, burning a country down with one fire breth or even a dragon with the abillity to swollow the earth in one bite 2. the western look strong and mighty, full of mucels, the eastern look like a big snake (there are even some western earthdragons, that look stronger than eastern dragon) 3. eastern dragons are only evolved fish or snakes, food for the mighty western dragons that are born invincibil But i am only comparing dragons, not countrys or humans.

Didn't you underestimate Guren a little to much or is it because she is not as strong as in the anime jet AND is underestimating Naruto? Because if we go with the Guren with the strenght from the anime, she should be as strong as Kakashi and Zabuza at the same time. If we go with the original strenght from the anime, only 4 people from Konoha should be able to win in a 1 vs 1 against her by now. Tsunade if she use her forbidden jutsu, the hokage (3 th), Jiraiya if he use Sannin mode and Gai if he opens all the gates he can

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James the great booty hunter!

So she not only his not a virgin anymore, she even sold her body to man like a prostitute. One of the most disgusting things a woman can tell you. Who want's used goods or how does the Hero of mankind deserves something like that. She was even trained in that way, do you know how used up she is. Sorry, but i have to drop this story. That is to disgusting for me and takes cast's a shadow over this great story i can't forget

Sorry, but that is the first chapter i can't understand. What is with this big reaction of them dating? Every time i meet the parants of a girl i was dating, i was welcom and treatet like a VIP, the only thing they ever told me was to use protection (i know from my frinds, that they all had similar experience to mine in the past). The only reaction i can still somewhat understand is Mrs. Evens, but even her reaction is a little to strong.

The new cover picture looks more professionell, but the guy in the picture looks more like a rundum Manga charaktere and not realy like Snape. I liked the old cover more.

No, it is a original work of Melucas.

Start of the story of the great booty hunter. To all men around the world: "You can't run, you can't hide, because James the great booty hunter is hunting you!"

If you include the kiosks, restaurants, gas stations... in the neighborhood, than no survivor should have food problems for the next 1-2 years maybe even longer. The same goes for oil, medicine...... the only problems i can think of are hygiene and toilets because you can't waste water on this. The Rest is only not beeing eaten by zombies. Maybe heating the appartements in winter is also a problem, but i have solar panel on the roof and elektro heater (so i can still cook in the apokalypse)

That is a part i don't understand in most zombie novel. The smallest shop in my neighborhood could surply a group of 20 people for a year without problems, the intermidiate ones 50, the big ones 70-80 and the biggest 100. And that even with including the expiration date on food and only botle water even for cooking. Of this shops, you find close to 20 in 7 km range, even 4 in 500m range. Even the food stock in appartements is a joke in novel. I am not prepared for anything, but could still eat and drink for the next 6 month, without leaving my appartement. If i loot the other appartements in my house, i can live here with 3-4 people for a year without missing anything

I enjoy to see this George try to court Mary, only to fail again and again. It would not be a fun story without some enemies or annoying guys to smack some faces. George has good potential to become Snapes new pranking target when Potter and Black are finished [img=recommend] Or maybe there is a bigger secret about George? Maybe he is a secret Death Eater that wants to use Mary as some stepping stone to become close to Snape, because he works for Lucius?

Ever read "Against the gods"? MC quote: "There are only two ultimate goals that a man pursues; one is to conquer the world, the other is to conquer woman. To conquer the world is to reach a new hight in life, but to conquer woman, is to embellish the scenery of life. If one isn't able to conquer the woman that he wants, even if he conquered the entire world, he would still be at a lonely summit and experience loneliness everywhere." Quote from me: "A harem is most man secret dream, it's onley that most give up before even trying"

Please change the chapter, Kyou Kai fall in love with Shin because he provided her with a home (his unit). If you give her away now, she is set for Shin again and can't join the MC harem, giving one of the best woman away. If you ever want Kyou Kai in MC harem than she must join his unit. With Kyou Kai in your unit you get also Kyou Rei and if you stop her ritual even Kyou Shiki (twins). Maybe even the Kyou tribe in the future. The tribe was extrem poor, mabe you get her tribe full of strong warior maiden if you offer them fertile land + protection for there non combat people and good position + good sold for combat people. They even have there own informant group.

Take Bi Tou and Kyou Kai or you can't get Kyou Kai in you Harem. The reason she fall in love with shin was, he provided her a home (his unit). If you give her up now, she is set for Shin.

Peter is the charakter i hate the most even his canon dead was to good, even with a charakter change, giving him May (the girl he likes) is more than he deserved. Lupin gives me the vibes of a tramp/hobo, giving him Tonks in canon was to good for him and ruined her in my eyes, maybe with his changing charakter he will finaly be worthy of Tonks. Don't match Mary with this Low-lives.

It hurts every reader to see a good girl with some loser. In your novel onley Snap fit as a good mach at the moment. So have to use a treesome, introduce a new guy in her age or change a charakter to fit Mary (the only one i see at the moment that could fit her with some changes is Regulus Black) or you let Mary stay single I personly fevor SnapeXMaryXLily [img=recommend]

Not perfekt, but much better. Thank you for editing the the chapter