Vlad_the_lost

blind review, and author, is it a harem? that's the reason why I couldn't finish reading the second coming of gluttony so will there be any?

no comments? pls continue writing, author, it's not often that I read a novel with a reincarnated MC that actually thinks like an adult, and at least for me this novel is a good read.

it would have been a great detail if he did write it.

aight I'll trust you

reading this with Pride by Kendrick Lamar hits dif

yo, one thing to remember is to make your readers immerse in your story, make them forget they're reading as you lessen their what ifs or "what this guy should have done is..." and when doing something commit to it fully, that's all good luck author

or the fastest techniques, flying thunder God or Lightning Chakra mode

There are little to no, grammar mistakes however your way of making them talk or dialogue for short is unnatural. Make your character joke or some humor. When Yae wants to use illusion, I assumed she would just do it suddenly to add a bit more character; to add mischievous to her; to not make her flat. Overall, it's good and I wish you luck.

The dialogues look like they're acting for a high school activity

The studio who animated Naruto is pro NaruSaku ship, that's why you see less NaruHina ship and more bullshit Sakura scenes that make no sense. So I disagree, NaruHina should have happened if not for the animators.