Got bored reading novels, so I decided to give it a try myself.
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*Writing this at Chp 353* Enjoying the story, the only thing I find annoying is the romance aspect of the story. The initial interactions with yua were realistic and engaging but then the mc just never sorts anything out with her after their *fight* and it's kind of unclear whether he likes her or not at different points in the story. Then onto Naomi which is kind of a one-sided love story from her but because of the constant mentioning and interactions with the mc family, I felt like it was going to progress somewhere which it just hasn't to date. Kind of frustrating. Then the whole situation with Ruby I've got to say I'm not a fan one bit. The fact that she doesn't exist in the real world and yet has feelings for her out of all three of them is just stupid in my opinion. Not trying to flame here, it's just not realistic. Nobody even tries to question his relationship and acts like its normal to want to marry an in-game character. Whether there is going to be a way for ruby to cross from the game into the real world down the line we will see, that's the only way I see myself understanding their relationship. And for the last point the fact that every love interest hates each other when they are trying to get the mc attention is just annoying and contradicts their personalities in my opinion.
Changed🤐
I understand, truthfully, I'm trying to find a balance of how many jokes are enough and how many is too little right now but one thing I will say is that through time, Ryan will learn to appreciate boxing more and more and therefore become more serious with his training and future fights. And of course, that will change his character as well. Appreciate the input though!
These are my initial thoughts at the time of starting this novel. I might not have a wide range of knowledge of boxing but I hope to make this a gradual advancement of Ryan's journey as he gets stronger and learns more. As for the writing quality the readers can decide but I will say this, I've tried to involve a comedy theme throughout the book. Whether or not that works, who knows this is my first time. Let me know, what everyone thinks, this will be a work in progress. Thanks Author!
My description of a woman is probably terrible, but I didn't want to do the classic 'Jade like skin'
Author here! Shameless review but who cares right... This is my second book, so If you like this check out my other works! With that said, I'd appreciate feedback, and any thoughts on my work in general, after all I am new to writing.... Thanks!!!
Was in the hospital for a little while but everything is good now so there will be daily updates.
NGl, ketchup is horrible. I’d rather have my food plain!
Thanks for the support! I’ll make sure to check out your work when I get a chance.
I haven't read much of Patheon of gods but I can be sure this novel will remain different from it.