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The quick change of plan to raid the palace entry and disguise in witch and wizard is good thought of plan........[img=coins][img=coins]
The story beginning para is good. It creates a sense of worry for main protagonist Veeir why is he chasing him.[img=coins][img=coins]
There is some lovely dialogue in this story-well done for choosing effective verbs for the dialogue instead of using 'said' all the time. you have used other words such as shouted and exclaimed. This makes your writing more interesting and exciting to read. [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]