Nxgen_Snail_Kota
I like to read most of the time, and anything I write will probably be trash cuz I'm absolute shite at it and I'm still gonna do it cuz its fun.
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Nxgen_Snail_Kotaa year agoReplied to Door_kunWhat country do you live in where school starts at 3?
- Nxgen_Snail_Kotaa year agoCommented
Bro is not Thorfin
- Nxgen_Snail_Kotaa year agoCommented
Property tax, the cost of ingredients, maintenance, employee wages, the business tax, employee benefits (If there are any) and any repairs and renovations means this cafe should have gone under if it only makes 150,000 a year. (Unless it's financed by the MCs family)
- Nxgen_Snail_Kotaa year agoCommented
- Nxgen_Snail_Kotaa year agoPosted
This guys stuff is always fun to read so five starts. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
- Nxgen_Snail_Kota2 years agoPosted
This one, just like everything else I write is a random collection of thoughts I came up with while washing dishes put onto paper with no filter.
- Nxgen_Snail_Kota2 years agoPosted
The entire story is filled with references to other fictional works and random moments that were funny in my head. If you want an actual story, read sum else cuz this ain't it.
- Nxgen_Snail_Kota2 years agoPosted
Not bad. The Grammar is fine, and so is the basic sentence structure making it readable which I can't say for 75% of the works on here. The world background is already set up so to get lower than a four you would have to actively try and fuck it up. The story development is fairly quick but that's fine as UBW is filled with a lot of bullshit that could be easily skipped. Character Design... could use some work. Dialogue is fast and without substance, instead of reading as two characters having a conversation it reads as two people running lines with each other. Someone will say something, someone else will say something and move on without expressing any emotion, or tone. The question and exclamation marks will only take you so far before it all starts to blend together in a banal mess of conversations that feel more like dialogue options from an Oblivion NPC than two people actually talking to one another. Plus, (And this is a personal opinion) it's really ugly when there are sound effects to demonstrate what characters are doing instead of something like - ("She broke down into sobs, staining the front of my shirt with her tears") Or ("Our conversation was abruptly ended by the ringing of the lunch bell") But otherwise it's a fine fic.
