Loaded_Demigod29

A-Train after his redemption is a pretty cool guy.

He never properly trained Rhaenyra nor did he even try to reign in her worse tendencies.

Bro just armed the next David to fight his Goliath.

Tbf at that point bro was old and senile.

Bro, he stripped the faith of their military, gave Targaryens basically religious “immunity” written in law, and managed to turn the common people towards him than the faith. What more do you want from him?!

3 men climbed into a tiger pen to get a “closer look” got mauled, and the zoo had to pay for the damages.

Great job on the characterization. The emotions were vivid. 👍

It’s moreso an outline of a story than anything. Everything is so rushed, nothing is explained, and stuff is basically speedrunned through to the point you have no idea what is going on and just get whiplash. It desperately needs a proofreader, and I can’t believe I am saying this, slow the pacing down. 5/10.

China.