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Hello, people! I am a writer, new to Webnovel, looking for feedback on my writing. A bit of trivia about me: I love cricket and tennis. I like listening to pure music. Comment often and read on!

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Replied to Cooldude3

    ... Thank you!

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented

    Symbolism. Marco's the lost soul.

    "Why aren't there any people around?" Marco asked himself while looking around. He spent several minutes walking and searching for any trace of human life. After quite some time, not even a single soul passed by.
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Posted

    This is a great novel. It's very perceptive and the storyline is awesome. The writing is simple, but a little too simple, so personally I'd prefer a bit of description. But it's really easy to read. The MC has an amusing personality and the world building is pretty vivid. Wonderful work!

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Sympathetic Person: What were his last words? Relative (sobbing): He...(gulps and weeps hard) he sighed... Sympathetic Person: ... At least make your last words valuable, mate.

    "Sigh…" Alan sighed before he lost consciousness.
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    You have succeeded in making me feel worthless. Without uttering a word. That's a new record. Very insightful, though.

    He was just a person in a country on a planet named earth. Which revolve around a yellow dwarf star. Zoom out a little more and you can see that the yellow dwarf star known as the sun is one in a hundred billion stars that revolve around a spiral galaxy known as the milky way. And the funny part is that it doesn't end there. Our galaxy, the milky way is just one of the trillions of galaxies found in the universe.
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented

    It's all good. The chapter was great, the writing was great, characters were awesome. Thank you for lighting up my week and I hope you feel amazing soon :)

    Ch 20 [Extra] 1: Quarantine Buddies
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented
    Charleston: (raises an eyebrow, his arms crossed on his broad chest)
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    I just--I can't even--how perfect is this? How much more Tito Charles can you get? That "...do whatever." is amazing, tho.

    Charleston: Yes, You! Stay at home, and do your thing, anything. Leave the house if the situation is indeed necessary. Watch your food intake, and make sure that you eat healthy foods. Do some exercises, or do whatever.
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Replied to Black_lotus_2004

    Thanks a lot for the honest review. I am not offended at all and I appreciate your frankness. I have just stated the reason for my heavy description in the synopsis. Hope you understand :)

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Replied to Entrail_JI

    Hey, thanks a lot for trying my novel and giving a helpful review. There is a reason for the long paragraphs and description and I have just mentioned it in the synopsis as this is an issue being pointed out by many readers. I'll try to edit them and make them better. Thanks again :)

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Posted

    This is a great novel. The storyline and characters are well described but the writing quality can be vastly improved. The pacing is fast and the plot is quite engaging. The only problem are the minor grammatical mistakes, and if they can be improved, the work would become out class. But, aside from that, amazing work, Author.

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Replied to KamiKrimson

    Thanks a lot for your honest review, Kami!

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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Posted

    This is a pretty great novel! From the unique plot to the amazing description of each Zodiac sign, it kept me glued to my screen. There are some minor grammatical errors, but the idea and storyline of the novel are different and extremely interesting. Every character has their own personality and the explanation of this new, magic-filled world is quite intriguing. Overall, it's very well thought out. Fantastic work, Author! :)

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    The Last Celestial: Rebirth of the 2nd House
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Posted

    This is a really promising novel. The writing quality is okay but attention to detail is pretty high class. The formation of characters is great and the plot is unique. The pacing of the story is slightly fast but it keeps the reader hooked in. Overall, great job!

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    Life of a Villain
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented

    This chapter represents how people have hidden their pasts behind their bright smiles. Dacron, who I thought as amusing and entertaining, has a deep, apparently dark, past that haunts him. He's not exactly a lost soul, but he is confused on the inside despite pretending that he's not. Be kind to EVERYONE, but especially the ones that light up the world through their small actions because their smiles show that they're better at bearing the weight of their past.

    Ch 19 [8] : Positive Façade (2)
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    I love the mannerisms of each character...it symbolizes their personality quite well. Dacron and Cooper are usually care-free and amusing, as shown in, well, every conversation. Tito Charles is caring, but protective, shown through the "harsh pat" Marco gets. Marco is lost, shown in his random behavior and inability to process his replies and concentrate on himself. Very well done, mate.

    Ch 18 [8]: Positive Façade (1)
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented

    Beautifully written. This is a nice representation of that feeling when you're surrounded by people and nature, but there's a faint aura of solitude hanging around you. Yet, somehow, it doesn't feel bad, it's more of a rare bittersweet realization that not everyone is a lost soul, and even if you don't know the way, you only have to keep looking because the world is ready to guide you. I hope this makes sense. 😶

    Ch 17 [7]: Little Banters (3)
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    Commented

    :'(

    The lone soul fought the growing sense of enviousness in him. He tried to dim down the overwhelming feeling, shoving it far away so there would be nothing left but forced contentment.
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    I have been gifted with the spirit of Dacron...cuz this is just very relatable.

    "Hey, Tito! Aren't you gonna ask if I want some too?" Dacron asked while childishly raising his hand to get his uncle's attention. "I also want some, and maybe you could add a creamer as well."
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  • Happy_Person_8656
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    My mother when I say sorry after breaking the 6th expensive plate in the house.

    'Sometimes, people will only apologize for the thought of doing it. Even if one would say sorry a thousand times, every sorry meant nothing more but just a word that needs to be said.'
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