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ArgoTheSkywing1dCommentedJessie*
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You know this is one of the villains I don’t want to die, because living with failure is so, SO much worse for him.
The raccoon's cries formed a grim symphony that seemed to resonate with the High Evolutionary's sense of purpose. To him, this was not just necessary but a gratifying step towards the culmination of his evolutionary ideals, a sacrifice at the altar of progress and perfection. - ArgoTheSkywing6dCommented
Ok question, how old is Cori here, cause I at least want Damien to be 16-18 before anything serious ends up happening. If she’s like 13 it’s way less concerning than if she’s 21 atm.
Damian cleared his throat, "Ahem… I do not mind volunteering myself for the morale of the night. But I will ask that you all reserve any laughter and amusement to me alone and leave my partner out of it." - ArgoTheSkywing19dReplied to Katsu39
I mean it was too good an idea to not offer/expect to be the case.
But it was already too late with the snow covering the ground and Marowak's weakened state. The bone slipped and they fell into the incoming avalanche, finally ending the log. - ArgoTheSkywing19dCommented
Oh my god Cubown is this Marowak’s kid Isn’t she?
But it was already too late with the snow covering the ground and Marowak's weakened state. The bone slipped and they fell into the incoming avalanche, finally ending the log. - ArgoTheSkywing21dCommented
No should be Yeah
Ash snapped back into reality releasing he wasn't alone, he put his Pokedex down and thought of an excuse, "No I'm fine I just realized now I have all three of the Kanto Starters." - ArgoTheSkywing23dCommented
They better keep Arbok and Wheezing, would make sense considering they’d have more Pokémon to fight the Tyranitar with.
This was Jessie and James - ArgoTheSkywing24dReplied to Katsu39
Honestly if you plan to do multiple girls, for starters, all within 2 years of Ash’s age or less please, and secondly, no more than 2 of 3, because at that point it is just women collecting. And honestly, I like Serena being an overprotective sister type rather than his lover, so please have that be the case. Besides Ash has a lot of good female travel companions he could end up with instead of gym leaders and such. I’d still probably prefer just one or even none for romance, but I feel the above is a good idea, any more and it becomes a hassle, plus annoying to write I imagine.
Now that you receive an extra chapter I demand stones - ArgoTheSkywing24dReplied to Katsu39
Also, eventually when you get to about 300-500 chapters, maybe you could go back and do some early chapter rewrites to make them flow better and more match the later chapters in quality?
"Well, would you like to come with me?" Ash asked, making Machop look up, "I can help you get stronger and you can make some more friends, what do you think?" - ArgoTheSkywing24dReplied to TechyBalake
It does get a lot better in later chapters
"Well, would you like to come with me?" Ash asked, making Machop look up, "I can help you get stronger and you can make some more friends, what do you think?" - ArgoTheSkywing24dReplied to Katsu39
Inferno, Incinerator Drive, and Immolation. I think any of those would be good name replacements.
[Ability: Chlorophyll, Hidden Ability: Thick fat] - ArgoTheSkywing26dCommented
Cannon -> canyon
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Thanks man
"Well anyway the sunset, we should be able to find the lighthouse soon," Ash said as they looked for the lights of the Lighthouse. - ArgoTheSkywing26dCommented
4 should be 5, Pikachu, Abra, Clefairy, Bulbasaur and Squirtle
"Well I have these 4 out now, but most of my other Pokemon are sleeping, and the rest are in Professor Oak's ranch." Ash said with the half-truth, but he knew what Bill would ask so he chose his words carefully to change the direction of the conversion, "Actually he gave me permission to carry more than 6 Pokemon." - ArgoTheSkywing26dCommented
Also, dunno if you'll be down to, but when it comes to scenes where a specific place and such is mentioned, could you include a pic or something along those lines? I barely remember anything from the parts of the anime I did watch, and I do not remember watching this episode of Kanto at all, and I don't even remember most of the Kanto episodes I did watch when I was like 5-10 or whenever it was I watched them.
"Well anyway the sunset, we should be able to find the lighthouse soon," Ash said as they looked for the lights of the Lighthouse. - ArgoTheSkywing27dCommented
…Was this Abra foreshadowing I just realize?
So over time, Ash used aura to slowly start the healing of Bulbasaur's bulb, if this was some bad cultivation story this could be considered fixing one's mana core cliche. - ArgoTheSkywing27dReplied to ArgoTheSkywing
Well, I have watched some Kanto till when Charizard got injured and healed and such, and Hoenn, but I BARELY remember anything from those.
"Anabel, age 14, appeared a few years ago with amnesia, found unconscious on the beaches of Alola taken in by Looker and Nanu, a Fallers with minor psychic powers, did I get that right?" - ArgoTheSkywing27dReplied to Katsu39
Ah gotcha, only Pokémon series I watched fully was XYZ, so that might be why, I can barely remember any of the other series, and haven’t watched anything after XYZ
"Anabel, age 14, appeared a few years ago with amnesia, found unconscious on the beaches of Alola taken in by Looker and Nanu, a Fallers with minor psychic powers, did I get that right?" - ArgoTheSkywing27dCommented
Fallers?
"Anabel, age 14, appeared a few years ago with amnesia, found unconscious on the beaches of Alola taken in by Looker and Nanu, a Fallers with minor psychic powers, did I get that right?" - ArgoTheSkywing28dReplied to _APOCALYPSE_
That he’s fine?
"Psy-sy-ys-sy ╮(. ¯ ﹏ ¯.)╭" Psyduck said, he was fine since MIsty insisted on giving him Headache medicine.