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I like the direction you are taking this story

as***** grandparents.

A little too angsty but writing is good.

what is this good and bad yakuza thing is even about where seemingly everyone is like you can't discriminate against them, this is ----ist ?? And why are mega corporation even afraid of them?

cool

Why are you even making tests so complicated. Now you will have to make another tests for jounin. This will just drag things. You can skip some things otherwose this will be one of the many things that dont go past chunin arc

This is like every naruto fanfiction condensed into one. I have read literally the same story so many times and nothing much different have happened in this onr so i can't judge whether it will be good or not. Will have to see whether this one will finally continue beyond Chunin arc as very few naruto fic go beyond that. F d d .d . D d d . D d d d. D d d d d d d . R r e .E w w e. D f g h h .Y t r r e . F f g t y H u y r e .S f g . H h h y t d d. F g g g g y . E e t . U 4 3 e s f .Gy. 6 5 3 2 2 w d .F g h h 6 5 4 3.w dfgt 4 2 s . Gy6yte

What even is this.

Rather than trade with westeros as focus. MC can focus more on trade with essos as they are richer, less prejudiced than westrosi lords(as they trade with savages like Dothraki) and he can hire manpower quickly. Get some ships if you can kill some slaves that come to capture slaves.

Lol. Djinn get rekt

Keep up the good work

Your villian character is the most cliched chinese protagonist ever.

with other kids. not with adults.

Great

If you powerup your protagonist like this then in 50 chapters you wont have anything interesting to write about. It will be just look people how cool i am every chapter