Retsag
Hello kind stranger! I am Restag a young French author trying his best to make a not too bad story. You can contact me on: https://twitter.com/Retsag99 https://discord.gg/5sDqHM57XG Sincerely Retsag99
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Retsag5mthReplied to Dunhyll0147Sure, I have a twitter, Reddit and Discord acount if you want to speak in private or public.
How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't.- Retsag5mthReplied to Dunhyll0147
Whoa, who knew that going up to a stranger and shouting at them about their work was a valid marketing strategy ? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ On a more serious note, thanks :] I hope I helped you improve your story even if just a little bit
How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't. - Retsag5mthReplied to Dunhyll0147
ps: your turn now
How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't. - Retsag5mthReplied to
... what did I just read ?I... I don't know what to think.It's just so long and all over the place without clearly stating what the main focus of the book is about.I feel in increasing order: intrigued, extremely confused and completly apathic to it all.In conclusion and no mater if its intentional or not: its bad
How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't. - Retsag5mthReplied to Iceknith
If you're refering to the "it" in "its pray", then it is correct.The "it" is replacing predator
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yeah, it's abdurdly distracting to repeat absurdly so much.I'll stop this absurdity in about two absurdly long hours!
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Iceknith: *in heavy british upperclass acsent*
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Hey, we should really fire the guy who though this was a good idea.
-Isn't that the robot I gave an arm to?" I asked aloud, causing said robot to stop whatever he was doing, turn around toward the elevator cage, exit the thing before turning to me and saying: "L'ascenseur prise de vue menant jusqu'au dernier étage est actuellement en réparation, le temps approximatif de réparation est de 3 heures et 42 minutes. La fondation vous prie de bien vouloir prendre le 3ème ascenseur jusqu'au 722 étages puis continuée à pied jusqu'au 1240 étages pour un temps de marche estimé de 8 heures et 15 minutes." - Retsag6mthReplied to pitichicken
Every ancient object collector/museum be like:
Then, once done, a mysterious force started to not only pull the teenagers away from the container, but also close his wounds, pushing the hundreds of metallic shards out of his body and back in the container, at the exact place they were before the impact. - Retsag6mthReplied to pitichicken
Nicole
-I hope that you keep your promise, Dix." She threatened while looking down at him with piercing red eyes - Retsag6mthReplied to pitichicken
Uh, already have. 500 years ago
-Would you dare to oppose the will of God?" Said the black priest in a calm yet firm tone that seemed to be a question and a threat at the same time. - Retsag6mthReplied to pitichicken
I don't get what you mean(\serious)
-Over it is, the high ground I have! - Retsag6mthReplied to pitichicken
ゴゴゴ Much worst ゴゴゴ
-Aware of your surroundings, more, you should be." Said a voice coming from his rear - Retsag8mthReplied to pitichickenCh 166 The spark that broke the camel's back
- Retsag8mthReplied to pitichickenCh 166 The spark that broke the camel's back
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Uhm, no. Like, she didn't say yes So she isn't That's how it works
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fixed
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WHAT DID YOU SAY ABOUT MY KICKS?!?!
-JULIETTE!" Shouted the teenage girl as she jumped in Benito's back and low kicked, making the man fall over and accidentally fire a shot in the air before landing face first against the concrete floor. - Retsag8mthReplied to pitichicken
"save" is a big word since Ivy is probably one of the strongest persons in the world and that she can sustain herself almost indefenetively. Âmeless is saving himself more then anyone else right now
-We have 30 hours to get to the spirit forest! - Retsag8mthReplied to pitichicken
Only took 2 volumes and 68 chapters for someone to notice... ... Are part of the resistance? (that would exlplain somethings) Just asking though...
-Romeo and Ju-