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It's not that I'm complaining or anything, but aren't the present people supposed to talk different than the knights in Camelot?
I like the story and what you did with it. the only problem I have with it is that the dialogues makes my head ache, sometimes is just a repeat of the same subject but just written differently to make up a conversation and it breaks the immersion for me. I'll still read read it though, it's an interesting take to the story.
Yeah, it's just a repeat of the same subject just written differently
That's the exact image I was going for and I was gonna upload it here but for some reason I can't.
It's so weird just to picture Danzo of all people to actually say please
A lock of hair? They counted her hair? They sure had a lot of time in they're hands
Thanks for the feed back! I'll change that right away.