Siven19
Soy escritor novato y este es mi pasatiempo, me entretiene bastante y si les gusta mi trabajo y me quieren apoyar aquí está mi página de patreon https://patreon.com/siven19
of reading
6060
Read books
I really would like you to continue writing this story but if you find it uncomfortable to continue I would recommend that you do another one and then when you are more confident and have more experience you rewrite this story (like all my comments, use a translator)
I thank you for having listened to my advice after all it is your story and I have no right to tell you anything about it but I appreciate that you considered it
don't worry your story is going pretty well leaving aside the fact I already mentioned and I hope you continue to make the story as you prefer to make it
I like the story but you focus too much on writing about the characters it takes a template from which makes it just a bit of story and the rest just information from a template character
I excited for another chapter