Overall, its Good and very well delivered the the readers and it just needs work on its updating stability thats all it need to practice. And Im impressed at how the story is made by a teen.

So cuteee!!! Nice story love this. please vote this write:)

its really cool a new story which i really like please keep up the good work its very fantasy and sad sometimes ita just good. good job writer

pls support my stories and I'am just a beginner and thank you for the people who viewed it i really apreciate it and when i showed it to my mom she said its a good start and im only 11 yrs old.