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Ashley7Black1yrReplied to TheLastOne95- Ashley7Black1yrPosted
To be honest ...the flow of the story seemed fast yet at a good pace. There are some words here and there that are misspelled and some words I am unfamiliar with(like Sylphear is a god I have never heard of... unlike undine or Garuda whom I am familiar with). But if I have to say...they are not a big flaw at all since this story sucked me into it so much more than I expected it to. It was a really fun read
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He is 7 Connor. Do u even hear yourself?? Sheesh .... what is up with these adults??
"Swinging a wooden sword for two years doesn't count as fighting." His voice dripped with venom. - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
*burned
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That's true
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*has ... i think
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Banished???
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Of course . If someone saw their wife in a pool of blood ...I am pretty sure they will want to kill unless and until they are a coward
That man was nowhere to be seen now. Viktor now boiled with rage. - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
That's right.It is twice as tall...so...it cannot be an orc ig
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An orc probably
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The plot is good and it has an interesting concept . But if I can find a fault then I feel like there are no cliffhangers in the end of the chapters (atleast from the first few I read). And in the 1st chap I was really worried thinking it was the Mc ...eventhough I was wondering how it started like this . But only in the 2nd chap they said it was just a dream . But from the 2nd chap the flow of the story was nice ...introducing all the characters subtly and making us aware of the characters and their personalities.
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I am surprised that she could talk abt such a dream so openly....
"Hey it's nothing like that." Said Lora "it just felt so vivid. I dreamt my aunt Cassy got raped and choked to death in an alley, and ever since I woke up I've been feeling uneasy, it's like I should be doing something." - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
Ik a friend of mine who zones out for like a minute whenever I ask her a question ...it is like earth to u !!!!
"Hello, Matthew." There was no response from the requested human. "Yo! Mathew! Goodmor-ning!!" - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
Thank God. I thought that was real. wait was that hee premonition???
A girl wakes up from a horrible nightmare. She puts her hand to her throat, feeling as if her larynx had been blocked. - Ashley7Black1yrPosted
This story has a unique feeling to it . It has scenes... which very much comes alive. Since I have never been a big fan of cards or games related to that ...eventhough the unique concept was interesting....I didn't get drawn to it ... But altogether..the plot is interesting and is very much worth reading from my perspective if u are a fan of gore or violence or demons ...then I think it might be ur .......pick .
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That explains author-nim
"Now, every element has elements that it is weak to. A spell is cancelled out by these elements. So, water is weak to thunder. This means that my spell is countered, and you take no damage. But I do. Since my spell was countered, your spell also does increased damage." A die appeared in Covenel's palm. It went up to twenty, and it just dropped down to ten from the spell. - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
vanguard???
"Now, every element has elements that it is weak to. A spell is cancelled out by these elements. So, water is weak to thunder. This means that my spell is countered, and you take no damage. But I do. Since my spell was countered, your spell also does increased damage." A die appeared in Covenel's palm. It went up to twenty, and it just dropped down to ten from the spell. - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
The strong prey on the weak........
"In hell? Not necessarily. If you are the one that kills the sinners, you are simply the executioner, the hand of god's judgement. Am I wrong? No one here is innocent. A sinner killing a sinner is neither a sin nor a good deed." - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
*a shiver ran down my spine
"Why not? We could have so much fun! I'd dissect your body over and over again and cut you up in so many different ways, and you'd never die!" The demon's lips curled, "you would feel every single little cut and tear.." - Ashley7Black1yrCommented
I kinda wished I hadn't imagined the scenario. I cannot unsee it now...
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