MidnightEgg
An Author exploring their own ways.
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The update schedule is tight, the characters got charm, and the writer got his tongue-and-cheek humor conveyed as he tells his tale. I've read some of the author's previous works and he's come quite far on improving both writing quality and language, whilst he's still not perfected his use of the English language I would assume most readers wouldn't find much fault if any (No problems which detract from story quality). The story takes its time, but it never grinds to a halt, if you're looking for a fun yet perverted story I'd advise you to pick this one up and give it a go.
Sheesh, just how small is her husband lol
Laximus XD, what a lad.
you will have to see the god of death himself.
how you lived your lives
would advise finding a synonym to replace suction. But so far I see wast improvements in your ability as a writer. Keep it up.
XD
She could see how nervous her husband was.
Just looked like one single piece of metal (The extra just is unnessecary and breaks the flow of the sentence)
The characters got personality, and the story is both humorous and interesting showing the development of an undead that is recovering its sentience. The writing is nice and smooth barring a few small hickups but other than that it's quite nice. If you want to read about an undead's adventures pick this one up.
Nice start for our protagonist, Skullius the bony boi.
Use the word demoted when speaking about a downgrade.
You can remove the "a"