Don't you mean, 'Count Lendais felt irritated'?

Shouldn't it be, 'in which the moonlight shone', instead of 'in which the moonlight shone in'?

Bain convinced him. I'll make that clearer. Thanks for catching that!

This chapter really gives you insight on the upcoming parts of the story. It is a sure step in a clear direction. Well done!

Thanks for your comments. It's nice to receive feedback (Tough or sweet) from someone you know has been working at the same craft for a long time.

Oh. Thanks for pointing that out!

Okay, thanks! At the time, I thought I would keep most of the plan hidden because not much goes amiss. I was focusing more on the general outcome and less on how to feed the plan to readers :)

There's a small typo here: {Shadows were cast all around around him. . .}

I like where this is going!

My reaction:

This story is already off to a great start. From the obvious connection between Ingrid and Wesley at the beginning to the detailed passion displayed by the fighters on both sides of the battle, this tale moves right along. My only suggestion is to make your transitions between POV's slightly smoother. But all in all, great beginning! I'm starting on the next chapter even now!

Thanks for the advice! I'll work on that during my upcoming chapters!