Kellan

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

Great chapter!

Opened the novel at like 3pm finished it in 6 hours, good stuff not suprised since this author is solid. Well worth the coins spent as the chapters are plenty in length, and provides enough contextualization.

The novel so far is pretty well written with interesting plot concepts that allows the reader to imagine multiple future possibilities that keeps them interested. I see little to no grammatical errors and overall a very interesting concept which I look forward too!

good shit i like the premise so far i like the relationship dynamic as of Chapter 35, but I do believe we need more advancement into what a Yandere is since she seems to be pretty mild even for someone who isn’t a yandere also the decision to maintain it has no harem is one of the best decisions as Yandere Harems are lack luster in my opinion and doesn’t demonstrate the development of relationship between the two people. This novel has a promising future though if you keep it up.

bro ur an incel

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aye aye we irish ain’t that bad

The story is good but the chapters seem very short, and situations fast paced. There is very little world building to understand the characters place and the environment there within. The story is very nicely written with grammar and detailing the characters expressions and emotions. But it feels hollow due to the quick pace and lack of build up especially present in moments where tension should be held is ended in a chapter. Overall I feel the author has a lot of potential, and so does the story it just heavily lacks world background and build up.