Silva_2654

AI made.

[img=sad] so many fake reviews, had to leave mine. But hey, story takes place in past... story takes place in past... story takes place in past... or something.

This is interesting and cool as a static image. The moment the story tries to move in any way, everything crumbles. For how much you talk about rhythm, I was expecting good pacing. But you rush and it all gets confusing. It's more like a Jojo joke, if you've seen the cover, you already had a good time, move on.

Wtf is this? Couldn't finish the chapter, the quality plummeted in a way that left me wandering if it was the same person who wrote the start of the story, sentences cut in half, omitting words. "Reiji stayed back, observing them how do they fight and how they respond to invisible attack." Did a weight lifting caveman wrote this? Is Godzilla ok?

What a piece of shit, thanks for the public service brother!!

I get what you're going for here, but at the same time I think it would be much more organic to leave it for waaaay later, when Toph is with the gaang, since you can't really lie to her, she would've seen through him, and since "huge steel balls" is kinda her middle name she would've confronted him for sure, meanwhile making jokes like "and I'm supposed to be the blind one" when pointing at the others, Katara would feel *insert feeling* for thinking he was just a 'good for nothing drunk and lazy', Aang would go on a self discovery meditation with the others avatars or some shit and Sokka, idk, can't think of anything right now.

I feels like you were high when you wrote the last few chapters.

Is rare to find quality here, yours is a gem in the middle of all this sewage, it's part of the reason I keep trying to find gold. Keep writing please.

Okay, this one was way better than 15, I approve of your cooking (grammar mistakes aside), keep it up!

That is a first in this site, and your story is really good, can't wait to see what you can cook up.