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It's got what it takes. Just need to work harder that's all there is to it. Just stars or good reviews cannot decide the quality of a story. It matters nt wheather you have a successful following. The most important thingsis to ask yourself whether you have put your heart in your work while writing this.

I hope not. But I cannot say for sure because the story may go in any direction.

This is cringe as fuck. I know the premise and idea were good when they was first introduced but this is getting old real quick. As soon as the story progresses, the mc forget his original motive to visit the worlds and just visits them for the sake of gathering more and more harem members. I don't know what happened but even someone like me can clearly tell this author wants to write smut. The story would still be good if it was a tiny bit more serious. I cannot read a single chapter without coming across a fucking sex scene of characters with questional intents and body proportions. If you want to write smut, or all intents go write smut Einlion. But if you want to write a good story, just write one. Because as it is, the number of sex scenes have become so ridiculously high that it has outweighed the general quality of the story. The more chapters I read I cannot help feel that Vahn is becoming more of a self important little shit and doesn't even treat his women as humans now. Forget making time for them, he is busy gathering more like a raging pervert. I don't think that many can relate to this very much. Your story could definitely do without more sex scenes. But then again, this has become your identity. So no matter what you write, how you write it, you will always be known as a smut fanfic writer. Many people like to dwelve themselves on smut to feel a quick bite of reading pleasure in this modern world. But to go cashing in on that and jeopardising that entire nature of the story is definitely not ok. I used to like your story a lot myself. I looked upto you. For small fanfic writers like me, you were an example of how far a fanfic can reach in it's popularity. I used to think that this Einlion guy could bring something new to the table and do something that has never been done before. But no. As soon as your creativity is extinguished, you straight up go and turn your mc into a pervert who goes to worlds seeking more women much like today's isekai animes. And that does do much trust me. You cannot watch an isekai anime now without cringing in the first ten seconds. You story's like that now. Even us small fanfic writers are not that desperate. At least we try to give or story a different twist even though we know that not many will read it.

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Home World : Cosmic Storms Body : Giant Humanoid Power and Abilities : Enhanced Strength Enhanced Durability Enhanced Dexterity Enhanced Agility Enhanced Acrobatics Enhanced Reflexes Cosmic Rays Space Survivability Temperature Resistance Enhanced Speed

Species : Tetramand Home World : Khoros Body ; Four-Armed Humanoid Powers and Abilities : Enhanced Strength Enhanced Durability Enhanced Agility Enhanced Speed Enhanced Reflexes Enhanced Jumping Enhanced Acrobatics Wrestling Proficiency Strong/Sharp Teeth Sonic Clap Shock Waves Earthquake Generation Wall Climbing Heat Resistance Slime Spit (via cold virus)

Species : Vaxasaurian Home World : Terradino Body: Humanoid Dinosaur Powers and Abilities: Enhanced Strength Enhanced Durability Enhanced Agility Enhanced Reflexes Enhanced Jumping Stegosauride Features Size Alteration Strength Enhancement (when growing) Quadrupedalism Powerful Roar Powerful Tail Strong Teeth Sonic Clap Shock Waves Earthquake Generation Wind Resistance Heat Resistance Limited Space Survivability Slime Spit (via Cold Virus) Height : Base Form: 12'0" (3.66 meters) Giant Form: 60'0" (18.29 meters)

Species : Kineceleran Home World : Kinet Body : Humanoid Velociraptor Powers and Abilities: Enhanced Speed Enhanced Agility Enhanced Stamina Enhanced Jumping Enhanced Reflexes Enhanced Recovery Enhanced Strength Enhanced Dexterity Enhanced Durability Enhanced Directionality Accelerated Thinking Sharp Claws Wall and Water Running Prehensile Tail Vortex Creation

Species : Chronosapien Home World : Unknown Body : Robotic Powers and Abilities : Abilities Chronokinesis Chronopathy Time Rays Time Travel Time Reduction Retrocognitive Projections Space Survivability 360° Head Rotation Enhanced Strength Chronosapien Power Detection Temporal Consciousness Conversion Galvanic Mechamorph Enhancements: Chronosapien Head Key Detection Enhanced Stamina Enhanced Speed Enhanced Jumping Enhanced Durability Enhanced Time Rays

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Ok my mistake then. But that doesn't make that character any better. There is a limit to how open minded you can be to such situations.

Yup. no more than that.

This is just the prologue of the story. It's supposed to be vague as it was intended during writing the chapter and was also my initial attempt at writing. Later chapters are much better written.

This is a well written story. At least there are some people brave enough to write stories like these. A story is a work of fiction and it's ends lie where the ends of the authors imagination are. No matter what the topic of the story, a well written one is always appreciated.

Ok. I will try to shorten them. Thank you for the advice.

No comments but just read the first few chapters, yo will understand. I seriously don't understand how a respectful old man turns to an arrogant brat in a short time and the same man who loved his wife goes around sleeping with girls left andright, every single time.