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No_User_Name1yrCommentedLittle does she know that he's the Dad!
—|Felia: 'I'm sorry darling, I met an old friend who is now pregnant with twins! So we ended up shopping… Did you meet my cute sister?'- No_User_Name1yrReplied to Duke_Asmodeus
That says many things.
—|Feris: 'Eh!? The super hot guy is coming this way! Ah, is this the so-called pickup artist? Will he take me into a seedy hotel and fuck me senseless, leaving me after a night of intense sex? Then nine months later, I pop out a child and have to raise it alone!?' - No_User_Name1yrReplied to intermoment
You're probably right, but I did think of some counter arguments when I thought of the same thing. Her sentience doesn't change her biology, or a lot of the programming for that matter. From what we've learned at this point, sentience should unlock the limiters placed upon them. There isn't enough known about the Valkyries at this point to lock down answers, but it's fun to guess. This novel has a lot of interesting details to think about.
As the rush of climaxing began to fade, Three's body relaxed releasing her hold on Sam and allowing him to move. Separating from her for a moment, their eyes met as both of them panted for air and without saying a word they closed their eyes and kissed. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Don't do that. She could be used as a pet dog or a footstool or something. Just use one of those slave collars and add a new decoration to the house.
—|Vincent: 'This little bitch lied to my face! Wait until your damn friends are closer and I'll rip you all apart.' - No_User_Name1yrReplied to Duke_Asmodeus
That's the best gift you could have ever offered me. Now I can continue reading without worry.
"Listen darling! They kicked me out, saying the school was not my hotel and a slob like me should live on a bench somewhere and get gangbanged by homeless men! You must get revenge on that woman." - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Because she wasn't just fucked into submission, but fucked into bloody submission. His women be perverts worse than hermits, and she is no exception.
"How amazing. I never thought he could defeat Violetta before Felia returned. She looks so beaten up, only recovering thanks to his Anima… Why does she look so happy?" - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Greedy cumpster princess.
—|Ophelia: 'Don't worry husband! We can protect you at night for the low cost of three ejaculations! Auch!' - No_User_Name1yrCommented
How many times are you going to make me laugh in such a limited time? We've talked about my poor lungs author. You can't keep doing this to me!
"Listen darling! They kicked me out, saying the school was not my hotel and a slob like me should live on a bench somewhere and get gangbanged by homeless men! You must get revenge on that woman." - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Poor girl has already fallen into the trap. Learning for Silvaria is a recipe for disaster. 😂
—|Ophelis: 'Mmmm, we must work hard to learn seduction arts from Silvari. She will teach us how to make master unable to resist!' - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Not the outcome I expected, but a welcome one indeed.
Two beautiful pale girls kneeled on the wide bed, both with similar features and their sensual bodies on display. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
I hope he keeps her as a pet. Just saying.
As proof of their success, Zeno had Hina drag Yui onto the ground with chains as they headed toward the palace. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Though she hasn't had much time yet, I liked my first impression of Geko. It'll be hard to give a complete answer until she is fleshed out more. At this point, my favorite is Uta.
Who is your favorite character so far? - No_User_Name1yrCommented
One thing to watch out for is creating discrepancies. In the prior paragraph, you referenced the demon taking a big leap back to get away from Zeno. Right afterwards, in this paragraph, you said he is standing a few feet away from Zeno. If he took a big leap back, he would be farther away. I hope this helps!
Standing a few feet away from Zeno, he watched as Zeno stood up with a flash of lightning and a blue aura surrounding him while he was carrying an plane expression on his face. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
When someone is thinking, instead of speaking, don't use "quotation marks." I don't know what they are called, but you instead use 'these.'
"So are you going to answer me, or. .." Zeno stopped walking, "Something's not right." He thought to himself. - No_User_Name1yrReplied to Kirito_K5
I should have said something when I saw the other potentially mixed names. My bad. It's hard to stop to comment sometimes when I'm enjoying the story.
Anna could only see his back view but that was enough to make her tear up. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Save Andrew. You mentioned wanting to be corrected on mistakes and that English is your second language. It's easy to see you have talent with creating ideas. Good luck on improving your writing skills. I'm rooting for you.
"What? piss you?… urgh!!" Anna sighed, "Please just help me safe Andrew". - No_User_Name1yrReplied to Kirito_K5
Thanks for responding. There have been a few places where the names seemed mixed up, so I've been trying to go by context instead. Besides that, I like the context of the story so far. Interesting ideas.
Anna could only see his back view but that was enough to make her tear up. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
This is great.
Uta frowned at Zeno,"You took my first time and you don't even remember… I hope you die in a fire." She said before walking away. - No_User_Name1yrCommented
Uta's homewrecker senses were tingling.
"And who exactly are you, human? Step away" Uta said, placing her hands on Zeno's eyes as she focused her gaze on Anna.