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Victoria_Payton13dCommentedCh 15 Persuasion- Victoria_Payton25dCommentedCh 28 Chapter 28 : Midori's First Day At Work
- Victoria_Payton30dCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3 : Dying One Time Was Apparently Not Enough
- Victoria_Payton1mthCommented
? which previous question. whether or not he's ever had his fill or whether or not he thought he could be forgiven by the sky god?
"Well, your hands are pretty nice. Long fingers, broad palm. No wonder I didn't notice when you stole my things. You haven't answered my previous question yet, have you?" - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
author, I am proud and happy that you admitted at the beginning of the book that you were doing a lot of rewriting and you knew there was mistakes in the amount of mistakes are outstandingly large mostly with misspellings but other things as well but luckily still I am able to read it and understand everything you wanted to present it will be quite a good book when you get all the errors completed
Ch 8 Reincarnation of the Asura Lady - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
Author, iruppted is not a word.. maybe you meant invaded?
"She is not there" I mutter, my brain working on a dreadful image of what could have happened. "Elena irrupted in my room" - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
Author fix error . Squeezing her throat
"Did you just threaten my mate?" I grow menacingly and I feel her confidence slipping. "Do something against her, and I won't care who your father is, I will kill you" I threaten her quizzing her throat one last time before letting her go. She tries to regain the air she lost. I wait, there was no way I will leave my room with her still there. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
why doesn't he wash the chicken feathers and then use them to make a softer bed by making a mattress cushion out of them instead of burning them. it was mentioned previously that his bed was hard
Afterward, he boiled water to pluck feathers, setting aflame the feathers he'd plucked, washing the chicken clean before placing it in a clay pot, filling it with water, bringing it to a boil over a high flame, and then simmering it over a low flame. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
oops. or maybe add ...... as he was a young boy... it was a miss on my part
The man drank the water in her hand and shook his head to release himself from her hold, looking up at her. His face was covered in blood, his dirty hair hanging in front of his eyes. He looked as pitiful as could be. But when he lifted his eyelids, the gaze that peeked out from behind his dirty hair was the same as the young boy on the snow field years ago. Cold and proud, fierce and unyielding, like a blade reflecting the cold snow. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
change young boy to young girl
The man drank the water in her hand and shook his head to release himself from her hold, looking up at her. His face was covered in blood, his dirty hair hanging in front of his eyes. He looked as pitiful as could be. But when he lifted his eyelids, the gaze that peeked out from behind his dirty hair was the same as the young boy on the snow field years ago. Cold and proud, fierce and unyielding, like a blade reflecting the cold snow. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
when is he going to eat one of the precious chicken eggs since he has some extras I mean since their bed with Spirit food then there should be some benefits to eating one. just a thought it's probably coming up in the next chapter but I've been thinking about it
Wang Ba gritted his teeth and finally chose to sell the four Precious Chicken eggs in his hand in exchange for ten pounds of rice. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
I am not familiar with what the bonnet would be for her head and earlier chapter it was mentioned that he had a bonnet on his head when he woke up perhaps author could explain or add a meme picture of what this bonnet would be?
Idris went out of the car to buy a mini blanket and a bonnet at a nearby dry goods store. Then he put them on Sonia. After that, he drove till they arrived in the city, at the parking space of her residence, near her company. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
it wasn't wine she was drinking it was whiskey
After speaking, she got up from his body, tilted her head to finish her glass of wine, walked to the large bed, opened the covers, and lay down on her side. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
wrong name she mentioned herself instead of her sister's name. author
"You..." Luo Hongying couldn't take it anymore. In her perception, how could Mo Shiche be so intimate with Luo Hongying? She found it unbelievable and unacceptable, "You two..." - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
probably plucked it from his butt cheek
The butler: :( - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
so she started with nori when she was 5 years old and he only stayed for 3 years so it 8 years old she had never been to school. and she never had to go to school.
Nori had taught her for three years before leaving without a trace or leaving any contact information. - Victoria_Payton2mthCommented
hey there Author I wonder about the similarity in the main female lead first name is so similar to the first name of the female lead in your other book. perhaps there's a girl you like that's name is similar to both of those giggle giggle tease tease
Yuka swiftly and quietly settled back into her seat.