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  • SPSD
    SPSD10d
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    This is definitely one of the better stories on the site. Very well crafted and immaculate execution can be seen through the work. Lotm is a great power system and so, the Mc has a great cheat. More often than not, fanfics on the site are little more than teenagers writing dumb stuff that can be equivalent to brain rot. However, this story seems incredibly natural and good to read. Dialogue delivery is nice and progresses smoothly. It may get a little hard to understand upon the philosophical bits but that can be ignored. Story development is great, but then again, not many major events have happened as of yet. (Writing the review at 51st or 53rd chapter I think) Character design seems good. Certainly many layers can be seperated from a character that makes up for a compelling read. The moral dilemmas of the Mc are natural and don't seem forced. The only real problem is the updating stability, which gets 3 stars. but hey, at least we're getting chapters still and it isn't yet dropped.

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    SPSD14d
    Commented

    I do think the way Mahoraga's adaptation works is, even if he really gets immunity to a certain aspect, he would keep adapting to more effectively counter that aspect. Like in Gojo's case, bypassing infinity was not enough so he sliced through space, if that had not been enough, he would have adapted a third time, if not, an even stronger fourth adaptation would follow. Mahoraga adapts more and more, getting exponentially stronger until he can defeat an opponent. Solely getting an immunity is not what the adaptation does, and so, there should be no problem with his growth. But hey, you do you. The story is already very good. Kepp up the good work👍👍

    A/N: I hope you guys like my idea of his aspect. I hope I have covered all of the plot holes. Hopefully. And I know some of you will be like. Why is he getting nerfed and stuff. Look he'll be way too op if he was like the original. He is already op enough. Besides if he gets immunity to everything then what will he grow with?. Anyway if you have a question. Just ask. Also send me those lovely stones of yours.
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    SPSD1mth
    Commented

    HmmđŸ€” This 'training arc' is not fulfilling at all. What should have been an interesting delve into the deeper parts of the fundamentals that govern the world has been skipped over in just a few chapters without having any type of content at all. Let me explain more clearly, in the ancient setting in which Ramayana is set, the Gurukul system was a very revered education system with little to no flaws. Students learned absolutely everything that there was to offer. The teachers, which were the Gurus and Sages taught them Philosophy, Astronomy, Economy, Knowledge of Worldly Affairs, Astra and Shastra Vidya, Humility, Moral code of conduct, Dharma, Servitude and Ruling, Sciences, Medicine(Aaurvedha), and a lot of other things. [At least according to my knowledge] The Period of life which made the child attend the Gurukul extended from early childhood all the way to before adulthood. Meaning, anywhere between 5 to 17 or 21 Years old. Not only could the arc have considered to be an interesting dive into the entire world building and the powers which govern the world, in essence, delving deeper into the various components of the myths, it could have proved a very important point in the story with a lot of emotional impact if the matters of teaching and the philosophical guidances were correctly conducted. I'm sure there are still more chapters to this teaching, but it seems empty, devoid of any useful content that would help the reader understand the world or the characters therein better. All we've seen is Meghnad getting here, Shukracharya spouting some philosophical stuff which doesn't even make sense in the overall theme that has been established, and him not even taking the time to teach meghnad properly. The way the entire 'teaching' dynamic has been tackled is idiotic. Shukracharya is a very powerful and knowledgeable sage and is revered as the Guru of the Asuras. Him not taking the initiative to properly teach Meghnad is illogical. An example would be in this very chapter and the previous ones. Swing the sword while channeling your inner strength? How is he supposed to do that? the most basics of the yogic practices would be to meditate and unlock his root Chakra, to tap into the kundalini. However, even without that, he's already learned an Astra, a divine weapon that stems out from the pure knowledge of the universe. Also, we haven't seen him learn anything else from the guy. Is the Astra literally the first thing he taught him? I dont think Shastra Vidya starts so soon in the Gurukul, not to mention Astra Vidya, for which the students need to be properly educated on the pure scale of the universe before recieving. I suggest not doing so in any of the other works that you might be attempting to make. Properly establishing the world and the characters will engage readers. Doing this only makes the readers feel lost. We haven't spent a lot of time with the characters and things are already moving so fast. Anyways, good luck👍

    Ch 33 Chapter No.33 Training Arc (4)
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  • SPSD
    SPSD1mth
    Replied to Suryaputra_Karna01

    No problem😊

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    SPSD1mth
    Replied to Suryaputra_Karna01

    OK, first of all, thanks for the clarification. Second of all, that is a major spoiler for the novel. For a simple question such as this, you could have simply replied with "The rule hasn't been changed, it has simply been overridden under certain conditions. That is all I can say." Thanks regardless. I posted a review, it was my honest thoughts up until now, hope it helps you in some way. 👍👍

    Complete Death. No reincarnation, No resurrection, just an eternal void.
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  • SPSD
    SPSD1mth
    Posted

    I don't know what to say about this one. it's a pretty weird piece if work that feels... off to read. I started this without any expectations, but as I read, I was pleasantly surprised at first. It is an entertaining read and is a good way to pass time if you have too much of it. Though, all things considered, there is something very much off about the way the story is presented, the pacing, the dialogue delivery and the established characters. Lets go over all the Main points. Writing quality: I won't be lying, it feels like you are over compensating. In the few 30 chapters I read, I noticed quite a few peculiar words and sentence structures being repeated. Threads of Destiny, Cosmic Damce, Cosmic Order, Celestial Harmony, etc are thrown all over the place. It does not feel organic at all. It would be impactful they are used in sparingly, but throwing them all in just like that makes the work feel weird to read and even a bit disengaging. Story Development: Again, I won't be lying, the story development is awful. Sense of pacing is all over the place. In the very first few chapters, we get a climactic battle of Cosmic proportions, yet there is no engagement in the conflict at all. We know everything will turn out okay because we know the original Ramayana, and we knew that the Mc can't die yet, because the story needs to continue. The conflict between the Asura and the Devas feels bland and uninteresting. Not to mention we aren't even given a comprehensive understanding of the power system at that point, so such a large scale battle which could be used as a great way to develop the plot and gain tension was wasted. Another thing about the power system is the fact that the author introduces completely new elements into the story. Which is not wrong per se, but there is the fact that we don't even have the slightest understanding of even the most basic forms of power in the Universe, and hence, I felt lost and downright uninterested. Character Design: We don't spend a lot of time with any character. There are some dialogues here and there, which to be honest is not productive at all. The major figures do not talk as they should be, the writing feels way too poetic to read and the dialogue reflects that in some way or form. Dialogue is the way we get the most familiar with characters and it does not do that here. Major events are skipped over the in the matter of a few chapters or even a single chapter. There is a sense of alienation. The time that needs to be taken to get to know characters is simply absent. It is akin to not having a character to present at all. Updating stability: It is good. World Background: Considering the context of the Ramayana, the world building already gets a great score, solely based on the type of work it is trying to adapt. Short note: It is an somewhat good read but only to pass time. There is a lot of potential in the way it can be developed still but the opportunities one gets at the start of the novel are already gone. It cannot be classified as a gem or anything of the sort. In essence, a typical webnovel with a still learning author. Good luck author 👍, hope you get better at writing and deliver masterpieces in the future. I would suggest reading novels like Lord of Mysteries and Shadow Slave to get a batter sense of how characters and pacing can be set in the work.

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    SPSD1mth
    Commented

    Considering the context of Hindu mythology. That is literally impossible. Has the supposed comtext of soul's Immortality and eternal nature been changed? please clarify.

    Complete Death. No reincarnation, No resurrection, just an eternal void.
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    SPSD1mth
    Commented

    "The soul is never born, never dies once it comes into being, it never ceases to be. Unborn, Eternal, abiding and Primeval, it does not perish when the body is slain." "Soul is Immortal, Weapons do not cut it, nor can it be burned by fire, nor moistened by water, nor withered by wind." This is written in Bhagwad Gita. I understand that it's a story and it might differ in some respects to make it more interesting but it's never too great to change on certain aspects of Hinduism, especially when those aspects contain such intriguing and powerful philosophical theories and concepts. Though the story also does refer to the 'mind' these cannot be interchanged. Even the mind has several parts according to some texts. Long story short, Soul is completely and utterly immortal, Eternal, indestructible.

    Vibhishana continued, "Yes, my lord. I think it works better for Devas due to their divine souls and Amrita grants physical attributes which completes the package. and mortals who consume Amrita get physical attributes of it too but their mind or soul stay the same as their origin 'Mortal'."
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  • SPSD
    SPSD1mth
    Replied to Suryaputra_Karna01

    Paimon, Belial, Purson, Beleth, Marbas, Vine, Balam, Zagan, Amduscias, Agares, Eligos, Valefar, Barbatos, Satanael, Dantalion, Gremory, Botis, Mephistopheles, Malphas, Sytry, Stolas, Orobas, Vassago, Gaap, Aamon, Ronove and a lot of other demons exist in various books like ars goetia. Also, giving him the power of destruction like that made me feel dxd vibes, not to mention it is also connected to the Bael clan. I do think it would be better to make up some creative ways to change up the common clichĂ©s that are often associated with demons. Do not think on the abstract and what can make more destruction or what looks cool. Try something more primal, interesting, and dare I say, mysterious. there's an oversaruration of characters that ca. simply punch hard, change reality, control existence, erase other people completely, exist in two different opposing states and son on and so forth. People like to see change, something out of the box. Hindu scriptures are so full of these things, clever associations that challenge the western norms. Good luck. If you need any ideas, feel free to reply😁👍👍

    [Bloodline: Lucifer Morningstar's Bloodline]
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  • SPSD
    SPSD4mth
    Replied to DaoistvxXXIK

    Better.

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    SPSD1yr
    Posted

    Hmm. I honestly don't know what to say, but I finally remembered about all of my fanfics here on webnovel, and to my surprise, I completely forgot where I was even going with the story. And so, I did the only logical thing that came to mind. I dropped them, sorry to say. But hey, I'm back and with newfound motivation. And I won't be dropping this one... I think... probably... maybe... So, let's hope for the best and know this, the Barsoom series belongs to Edgar Rice Burroughs and it is not my property. The fanfic would be more in tune with the books and not the movie, but I will take some motivation from it.

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    SPSD1yr
    Replied to Raja1689

    novel name?

    (A/N: Man it's so hard to choose a good power for my next Marvel FanFic character. Also I have thought of a very good Finish for this novel)
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    SPSD1yr
    Replied to Ryucord

    sauce?

    [Trajectory Analysis: Able to perceive and analyze all incoming trajectories and attacks within line of sight to map the best course of actions to dodge with the least amount of movement].
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    SPSD2yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter~

    Ch 3 Marvelling
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    SPSD2yr
    Replied to Baldysalino

    sauce?

    Ghislaine nodded. "Of course. As soon as I recover, your training will double in intensity. I will hold nothing back in imparting my knowledge. You will bleed. And you will beg for it to stop. I will not relent until I am satisfied. If you cannot accept this, then I won't stop you from leaving."
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    SPSD2yr
    Commented

    Divine protection of Extreme Sense Makes the user hyper aware of his suurounding. Essentially nothing can hide from you within a certain range.

    please be wild with your imagination and give me more ideas of new Divine protections(also it doesn't have to be combat related divine protection ).😄
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    SPSD2yr
    Commented

    Prepetual Motion Converter(Ultimate skill) Convert all types of external factors affecting the body into magicules or different desired energies like kinetic and potential energy, which can be stored and later released without limit, effectively giving the host absolute defense and infinite attack. This is the normal mode of the skill. The skill can also be turned to overdrive mode which can produce an infinite amount of magicules for a limited amount of time.

    {AN: Comment a name for the city, I'm awful with names. Same goes with any skill ideas just comment them.}
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    SPSD2yr
    Commented

    Zortshignon

    {AN: Comment a name for the city, I'm awful with names. Same goes with any skill ideas just comment them.}
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    SPSD2yr
    Replied to diochu

    No. I'm just busy with exams

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    SPSD2yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter~~~

    Ch 9 Chapter 9: A stressful reincarnation.
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