I lose motivation fast for them. I start the story in one direction, but quickly trap myself within my own rules. I hope for the Elemental Gems to break that cycle.

Yes. Wherever the mana builds up and is released, it takes on the nearest element it can find. Some regions could produce hundreds of different elements, while others could be limited to just a few.

A new series stirs, the spark of life grows stronger. Ojero and Orpham, brothers, their trials are not yet over. One rises while the other falls, but without each other they are nothing. Light and dark, chaos and order, eternity and the end. Where in the disarray with glory be gained? You'll soon find out.

It will be out soon.

Yes, The Dark Mark was dropped, and is currently being remade into another story

Thanks for the review! I will say the "gasp" moments will definitely decrease over time. Remember, Ojero's life now is nothing like what it was. Everything is new and different from what he expects, so as he acclimates it will change. As for childishness, he is a noble used to being glorified and complimented, and is now in a new situation where he has no power. In that sort of case, even adults become childish.

Tyrion Lannister would certainly agree!

Its funny you make this comment the very day I decided to sit down and continue it. I'll try to make it when I can!

Put them all in agility and spiderman swing your way through the house at one month old

I've read up to chapter 70, but have stopped due to the grammar. Does it get better, and if so, when?

For anyone curious, this mode isnt referencing Tony Stark Ironman. Ironman is a more historical term meaning almost impossible, and many historical games have ironman as a mode where usually you cant save and things are more difficult

I wonder if this is a HOI4 reference

Know I know the author is an avid gamer. We ALL know if a game allows guilds or factions of any kind, the Roman copies come in waves!

If I see the word thus or hence once more time I'm going to explode. Why do authors use it in every other paragraph?

I'm sorry, if that is what you are looking for you won't find it here. I dislike super edgy MCs. The MC will be a villain in many regards, but in a means to an end sort of way. He won't waste lives, and will even save them when he can. He won't be unrealistic by simply being unable to care.

What chapters have you edited up to? I noticed a drastic drop in quality at chapter 15, so I'm assuming its there.

That makes 0 sense. Why do you think handsome people are our models and celebrities? Being good looking gets people to like you not hate you

Thank you for the kind words! I hope to surpass my first novel, and believe I definitely can! I have everything mapped out and planned so it should work very smoothly! I will NOT drop this novel, although there might be times where I don't post chapters. I work 3 jobs, volunteer, have school, and am trying to learn to play piano at the same time! (Not to mention a girlfriend and a social life!) My time is often taken up, but I push them out when I can!

Did teenage you do any different? I know from personal experience almost every teenager is like that. People died for ZERO REASON.