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Daniel_Lane_4048

Daniel_Lane_4048

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2021-05-25 JoinedGlobal
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_404811mth
    Commented

    Uh Oh, The Plot is Thickening. Seems it's time for our pal Clay to fight.

    Ch 2 Unlucky (II)
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    A Villain of Virtue
    Fantasy · Astronoot
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40481yr
    Replied to Daniel_Lane_4048

    It's alright my man! Errors happen to our text sometimes😄. Shoot I used to use an editing software and it left a HUGE wall of text at the end of every chapter😄 so you aren't alone. Don't let it discourage you buddy, keep pushing!👍

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    A Villain of Virtue
    Fantasy · Astronoot
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40481yr
    Posted

    Very good start to the story, I'm definitely going to enjoy reading more. And on the first chapter I think you have an error with your editing software, it left a bunch of text🤣

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    A Villain of Virtue
    Fantasy · Astronoot
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40481yr
    Commented

    Amazing Amazing Amazing Wording. 👏

    The comfortable canopy bed he woke up on is draped with translucent woven curtains. Around the walls were picture frames with curving borders, gothic windows on thick drapery, and intricately carved furniture of ash wood and marble.
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    A Villain of Virtue
    Fantasy · Astronoot
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Posted

    This is a fantastic story, I love the way the beginning is starting out. The characterization, the imagery and the writing quality are good for the story. I hope this gets more recognition

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    Unrighteous
    Horror · Okimoto
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Posted

    Amazing World Buildings, Great Characters, and fantastic humor quality however, the dialogue could use a little improvement. Other than that this story is great and I look forward to keep reading it.

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    White blood
    Fantasy · OJASYA
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Posted

    I absolutely love this story, I'm going to enjoy the constant updates for these chapters. Keep it up man, and I hope for succsses as you continue to write this story!

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    Beyond heavens
    Fantasy · RenCode
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Replied to Dystopian_Novels

    Thanks for the review👍. And while the stuff I'm introducing might see random it's there for future story arcs and I'm glad you like the story🙏.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1: Enter Navar Okayasu! The Child Who Dreams of Becoming a Warrior
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    Ozania Odyssey
    Fantasy · Daniel_Lane_4048
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Posted

    This is where I think my story is currently at. Also I'd like to add chapters will be added on here weekly rather than daily. If you have any constructive criticism or positive comments I will take them. Thanks🙏

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    Ozania Odyssey
    Fantasy · Daniel_Lane_4048
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  • Daniel_Lane_4048
    Daniel_Lane_40482yr
    Replied to Daoist6qCWGq

    Thanks for the review and I'm glad you like the story🙏

    altalt
    Ozania Odyssey
    Fantasy · Daniel_Lane_4048
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