The language translation does some hitches from time to time, but this a very fun read with the start of really great characters. I enjoyed the world, love the main characters, really I could spend much more time with them, the journey is a bit rushed at times, it could be slowed down and savored more, I do believe this writer is well on the way to greatness, if this is a start to writing, it is a really GOOD one!!!!!!!!! Great character interactions, easy to see.Will want to see more from this writer!!!

Very good!

This was a very well put-together chapter!

These are very fun GREAT characters, Alex is hot. LOL

I really like the story!

This was great! Funny! May want to take out the joke part?

VERY excellent at breadcrumbs for the story, I am interested in every sentence!

I would love to spend more time in this world!

A few spelling errors. I really love the tone of this, things are easy to see but feels rushed. You could take a little more time with the fighting. I love the ending of this chapter! I am in for this story!