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Story is kinda messy tbh but I can't really blame the Author since the series itself is still full of mysteries and kinda hard to write when u don't know where the most important plot point is. MC is childish and cocky which is off-putting sometimes but overall he is not bad. It's still early too judge but the other characters is at least decent, their monologue is kinda abrupt and jumpy sometimes tho. World background is already clear, we know how good From series is cooking so enuf said. Overall solid 3 but since there is no other From fanfic to compare we'll add some to cheer the author up.
Some dialogue feels stiff. Try to minimize the use of period (.) Spoken dialogue didn't have that many full stop unless it's a long sentence (>3 rows if your font size is big). It makes the character somehow speak like Yoda? Which is good if it's used properly but in this case it's surely didn't.
Idk... I think it's just my preference. It really feels kind of weird when god suddenly appear and info dump you. Too abrupt for me.
This is fanfic idiot stop forcing ur fandom theory here. if u want to do something abt it, make ur own harem fanfic.
在地下城玩原神是否搞错了什么?
RAW title?
Airmid
its good, but somehow i get a feel that the translation repeat itself somehow at the end of every chapter albeit slightly paraphrased in the start of next chapter but its good nonetheless. give the raw title pls.