I like this story so far. It's creative and the personality of the main characters brings the story in. You have some good talent. I hope to read more of your stories in the future.

This is a really good story! I like the creativity behind it and the love between family. The protective brother and baby sister really touched my heart. To be honest, not everybody has that kind of bond with their family, so they would read what it's like and the experience behind it, and you showed it well. You brought the feelings and emotions out in this story. I give you all five stars. Your creative mind was able to come up with these emotions in whatever way you did it. Good job! You are going to be amazing in the future. Much love from your girl M.P The Unknown Writer!

Thank you very much!

This is heart-touching in many ways, I already love this story.

The excuses you would give a person just to make it seem like you are not at fault here amazes me. She needs new friends and a better boyfriend. So far it's good I can't wait to read more.

Okay, I just did!

I'm glad you liked it so far Dev, and I hope the future stories will be pleasing to you as well. I say again that I very much liked, and still like your story as well. Thanks for the encouraging/loving words, and also my encouraging words to you is that you are going to be a great writer in the future. I had fun reading your story, and I'm glad my story had pleased you. Have a nice day Dev, and Thank you again. Much love from your girl M.P The Unknown Writer.

Thank you very much!

No problem. I forgot to mention that I like your writing style. You have your unique style of writing, and that's how I can tell it's your own imagination and creativity that was put into it. I hope that you continue in your writing talent/career, and I believe you can be even better in the future. Have a nice day Dev (If you don't mind me calling you that (If you mind please inform me and I will stop)) Much love from M.P The Unknown Writer

Bro, lol. He needs some new friends.

This was a really good first chapter! I can't wait to read more of it.

This is good I'm already intrigued by the story with the beginning.