sinbihan

My head is spinning...

This story offers a new take on Death Note, moving away from murder to focus on a more cynical use of the notebook. The MC is cold and strategic, a bit like Minoru. His plan is well thought out and makes sense. The tension with L is well handled, but the rivalry between them is a little less pronounced. Otherwise, it was a fun read!

The story captivates with a solid plot and well-developed characters. The writing is polished, but there are opportunities to deepen certain aspects of the background for an even more immersive experience.

I found your story creative with intriguing twists and turns. The connections between chapters and the themes explored were well orchestrated! However, maybe a few details could have been fleshed out further to enhance coherence.

It's a very captivating beginning. Can't wait to find out what happens next