ReginaldDabs

Awesome story! It's got me hooked and is very interesting. The writing style is great, and I love the way you write your characters! It's super immersive. Great job! Keep it up!

Great novel! I like the premise, and the opening was super interesting! I love the mysteries it introduced. The writing and grammar and flawless, nice job! Keep it up!

Great novel! I really enjoy the point of view of the protagonist. It really puts me in his shoes and makes me feel like I'm standing right there with him. Keep up the good work!

Great novel! It has really great writing quality, the english quality is really good too. The characters are very likeable and I really enjoy reading about them. Nice job!

Great novel! I really like the main character. Antihero/unethical protagonists are my personal favorite. The beginning is very intriguing and captivating, and the narration is really well done. Nice job!

Great novel! I love the narration, the main character feels really interesting and I like the way he thinks/acts. It's a very captivating read and I definitely suggest it!

I think "nerf" should be capitalized here (to "Nerf") since it's the name of a brand, right? Or, since "Nerf" is an acronym (Non-Expanding Recreational Foam) it could also be in all-caps? (to "NERF")

Indeed :')

Thank you! I've tried editing the chapters and breaking up the paragraphs, and it seems to work when I view it on the computer website, but when I view it on the mobile app it doesn't seem like anything's changed. Once I get that figured out then those big ugly paragraphs should be split up much more nicely!

Haha, as a writer, I can definitely relate to this. But separate from that, it's a good novel on it's own merit. It's unique and obviously very accurate - the best person to understand how a writer thinks, is a writer themselves! Really interesting novel and I definitely recommend it