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Utahime didn't have a scar when she was a student, but oh well not that it bothers me.
This is getting annoying on another level, i see grammar mistake, i say none of it. But why is it that it keeps explaining his past like 'your intelligence is 20 because you are smart and blah blah in your past life' for the past chapters. Its so annoying for you to info dump and explain every little thing over and over in every chapter. Its tedious to read and most of the time i skimmed through it and still not miss anything :/
Why resistance? Resistance of what? Resistance is when something or someone has experienced the same thing over and over again until he adapts and becomes used to it. I think Energy is more suitable option because Energy is like the description that you depicted in Resistance.
Reading this up to this point is torture, in the early chapter it is explained that he learned languages, studied stock and more etc. Etc. But why do you keep explaining it in every single chapter. We get it we just want the story to progress not read this story full of explanations and unnecessary info dumps. Try to binge read this for once. I can't take too much unnecessary info for this story.
So many useless info and thought process, can you just summarize his regret like in a 1 paragraph? It takes more than half of the chapter saying "His regret to basketball and his regret for his mother for the 1000x times this and that. Can you just go on the story without highlighting the fact that he has so many regrets? It kinda ruins the purpose of drama once you repeat it and point it out over and over again.
What am i reading? The description is vague, the fight is just to describe how "great, confident, amazing" he is. Not even a description on how he fought. Not even an 'he thrusts his sword to the enemy but the enemy dodged it blahblah.." can't you describe it in a more entertaining way? Or at least decent.
All is good in the novel so far. The only thing that is lightly ticking me off is the over-exaggerated reactions of the fans. You dont need to add so many unnecesarry comments.
At this pace, the story would be dropped or it will be ended in a rush? I think you should add more story for the filler part while stretching the story a bit more for the reactions of the fans to the story like Aot, hxh, naruto.
If considering this is Code Geass, the "World Government" would be "Britania" while the (Clan of D) is the rebellion?
I think Code Geass will be a fit to this fanfic because it will introduce "Mechas". It can relate to the "Water 7" arc or One Piece. And it can be compared to AOT in terms of protagonist, its just that the protag of Code Geass uses intelligence while AOT uses titan powers to see future.
You used "intuition" here again. He knew she hates the idea of harem because of "intuition". What a joke. Cant you use more variety of words instead of explaining every single thing with "intuition"? Because intuition is not meant to be used like that.
See here? His "intuition" just have to coincide with the "special task mission" which would be dating justine. Its like everything is going his way, there is no conflict, no excitement, nothing. Also to point it out, you are just making him stronger with brute force but there is none of his powers have technique. He didnt even master using weapons or honed it but you are making him more overpowered than it should be.