Abused_Eve
I like: GL, Kingdom building, Dark, Corrupted protagonist, Action, Psychological. I also like richly written side character, villains and bad guys. I don't like: BL, Harem, nonsense and Chinese novel.
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Abused_Eve2mthCommentedCh 4 Ch 4: You are trouble [pt2]- Abused_Eve4mthPosted
I read I learn mc does not know what happened is not sure if she killed her mom then few chapters later she learns that she remembered that her brother and ex were sus and wounds on her mother were sus and didnt seem to match hers then flashback ends she forgets that she remembered her bro and mate were very sus and blames herself for killing her mom prob 10/10 author fails in first few chapters and has memory of gold fish just drop it and don't read also there was 2 mistakes where mc was called he (as far as I read) anyways if story fails in begining and author cant fix it to make sanse then drop it and put 1 star to not help readers know that it's not worth reading (anyways going to remove negative review after fix if author comments on this after fix other wise this stays for people to see how badly it's doing in begining and to know how bad it will prob get later on ) Never lower yourself to mediocrity always seek perfection
- Abused_Eve5mthCommented
Reminds me of a time when I didn't know what "brb" or other shorter versions of words meant.
Lianna declared before running into the bathroom with her clothes in hand to change, hearing Enverna mutter "what does 'BRB' mean?" behind her. - Abused_Eve5mthReplied to RelRel
some men call war an adventure.
She was tall, curvy, and a very kind person who had a lot of problems because she was the only girl in her family who wanted to be a beast tamer, but never once was there a girl beast tamer within the royal family, which only made it harder for her to even mention what she wanted to be since she didn't want to be laughed at, she was not like the other girls within her family, she loved learning to fight and going on adventures with her family, especially her father since he was one of the strongest beast tamer they knew. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
should be "can" not "can't" would be negative
"My queen, you can't command us anything." One of the men said as she lowered his head. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
"The" not "he"
"The problem is how do I use this…" She thought about how she could use he wings to fly when it flapped and lifted her to the air. - Abused_Eve1yrReplied to invayne
Your choice. And I'm not forcing you to do anything just pointing out my dislike of this thing since I see it too many times. Anyways good luck on writing this and like I said in review I did not dislike the novel. Have a good day.
The reason why Aiu and Eve did not detect this fact was because they were in a dormant state, and only when they came into contact with liquid like blood did they become active again. Eve also had no idea what implications this would have in the future. - Abused_Eve1yrReplied to ChipWayman
That's nice way to say that someone has no abilities of there own.
This was all because of her breakthrough to the fourth level. She had been at the second level for quite some time and had gained a huge amount of experience from combat and training. Ming Yue understood that she was no genius and only hard work and persistence would help her. Not a single second was wasted. She always cultivated everyday, making her foundation very solid and practiced constantly. Coupled with the fact that her body had never experienced the efficacy of a cultivation plant, the effects of the Blood Lotus and the thunder roc blood doubled. Thus she was able to breakthrough two levels. - Abused_Eve1yrReplied to ChipWayman
Still not a good look, the dev of the site should make it easer then.
Ming Yue was somewhat surprised at Xiao Yin. She didn't think that she would have such a pet. She wouldn't have to worry about any assassins and be able to avoid any dangerous situations. Both man and beast were be hard pressed to try to ambush her. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
needs fixing "but the flying and was able to scratch her arm when she was about to strike." don't understand what is going on here.
The feral within Chika seemed to get out as she went to kill the next one but the flying and was able to scratch her arm when she was about to strike. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
Isaki saunds like japanese name and Pedras sounds Like Lithuanian or Greek since both end with S letter and If the Pedras was Petras it would be full on Lithuanian name xD
A man dressed in white armor stands in the middle with a big smile on his face, he introduced himself as Isaki Pedras, a knight. His long sword in hand amazed everyone as he looks strong and promising. - Abused_Eve1yrReplied to invayne
Understandable but like I said in other comments this is quite a bad way for you to go for foreshadowing when you try to overexplain things that don't need explaining and yes that was quite a rude way to go for me but I fully stand with what I said about this not being anything but poor writing it's not the worst way I saw people just spoil there story. I mean I get it you are now defensive about it because of the way I said it. I just am tired of seeing people just drop information that does not need to be shown and maybe it would be more interesting to figure it out for people on there own. Another thing me seeing this even on minor level does not look nice when I read further in the story and you just legit at one point say and eve does not know that in about a year humans will start attacking A.I. and lose many lives for such attack and cause A.I. to fully commit on exterminating humans. (or something like that) Like how would I know you wont drop something like this again and ruin your own story?
The reason why Aiu and Eve did not detect this fact was because they were in a dormant state, and only when they came into contact with liquid like blood did they become active again. Eve also had no idea what implications this would have in the future. - Abused_Eve1yrPosted
Quite okay story and so far nothing really happened much for me to be able judge to well. So far story is going well, story is going quite a bit slow but that might just be me. Character written are just few so I would say it's not very good. There is a few places or what's written that I don't really like or it's questionable how the author will use it. Well anyways so far story feels like nothing really happen. Foundation in the story is good so building story from here could turn out to be nice read depending how author go from here. Anyways I will update my review at some point later once I know for sure if it's a drop for me or I should keep investing my time in it.
- Abused_Eve1yrReplied to invayne
I only find this as a problem in what you wrote "Eve also had no idea what implications this would have in the future" it is not foreshadowing it's more like you are breaking the wall as author to talk to your readers who you imply are not smart enough to understand your last foreshadowing I said before to you about the guy waking up from being dead. (I'm not saying you think people are dumb but this very much imply that who is reading stuff can't grasp what is going on in the story)
The reason why Aiu and Eve did not detect this fact was because they were in a dormant state, and only when they came into contact with liquid like blood did they become active again. Eve also had no idea what implications this would have in the future. - Abused_Eve1yrReplied to tileb
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I mean there is foreshadowing and straight up giving the information to people. You already had foreshadow by just having the guys point of view This is kind of just for the dummies. And yes I agree good story have foreshadowing.
The reason why Aiu and Eve did not detect this fact was because they were in a dormant state, and only when they came into contact with liquid like blood did they become active again. Eve also had no idea what implications this would have in the future. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
Lilly*?
"If you could do that, that would mean Tezz could go outside!" Lily was really looking forward to showing Tezz the outside world now! - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
"could not control" maybe?
"Lilly, there is no need for that. It's fine. Sorry Tezz, I found you to be very cute and did not control myself." Eve apologized. She felt bad for the little bunny. - Abused_Eve1yrCommented
Only few people needed to do it. out of 7 bil. pop. or so.
"I was thinking the same. But please keep the idea of betrayal in the back of your mind. We do not wish to be caught with our circuits out." Aiu did trust Lilly now that she had kept her promise, but she was still wary of humans betraying Eve. They had once already, and that resulted in her death. She did not know if the whole being reborn thing would ever happen again. And she, for one, did not wish to test it.