Roonman
Ive watched a lot of anime and a few months back got this really cool idea for an anime, which I then turned into a light novel, and that became a webnovel. Thank you for being here! Destiny is all!
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Roonman2yrReplied to Andry_ReyesCh 1 Negotiation- Roonman2yrPosted
I love how pessimistic the guy is lol, rip his parents though. I think this is an interesting story, especially because it's reincarnation after a tragedy so there's a different kind of incentive for him to change worlds. The grammar and word structures need work because they make the story a little hard to read at times. Good job and keep on writing my dude!
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same
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Devil is usually on the left shoulder, so it's interesting he says its on his right
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Good Job author first of all, writign can be hard to do. I think the story is good, i liked th eexplosiveness fo the begining, you know revealing that she poisioned him and all, I liked that. I think this is a good story, my only problem with it is grammar, I think if you write in google docs it would point out some of your mistakes which could help. Good Luck!
- Roonman2yrReplied to Yvette_Celia
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I think that this is a really good novel, i only read a few chapters but everytume i read one it made me want to read the next and the one after it. The world building and character devlopment are great so far. I think you sometimes use words that are unnecessarily advanced, it makes the text feel unnatural. And ofc stability of updates but authors have their own lives to tend, so good luck managing time going further!
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or it is '46, im not sure now
EXCERPT FROM A LOCAL JOURNAL (2246) , EXCAVATED FROM ZONE 11. - Roonman2yrCommented
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Year 2246, June. Dominic Harman disclosed the existence of 'SYSTEM', AI created by so-called 'aliens' who pitied us. - Roonman2yrReplied to WyattJaymes54
- Roonman2yrPosted
I think that this is an okay introduction chapter and that it should be placed in a prologue volume so that people aren't confused. The first chapter doesn't contain any information, idk if it was an accident but yeah just letting you know. There isn't much material to criticize, so I'll try to give you a few pointers. Try to make your dialogue more natural, so that it resonates with the reader more. I thought the way you gave the information about the world was too direct, so maybe rewrite that since you plan to rewrite the novel. Other than, good job and good luck my dude! Keep writing!
- Roonman2yrPosted
This is the first story of its kind for me to read here, heck it's one of the few historically accurate memoirs I've ever read. I appreciate your strength and your struggles, don't ever let her get you down again. You got out there and you can learn and grow to become whatever you want. Much love my dude, and never stop writing!
- Roonman2yrCommented
Jesus Christ, sorry you went through that dude
When I started first grade, I was very happy and expectant of what will happen during the first school year. I was prepared to learn new things, such as read, write and even learn to count. But what I did not know, I had a teacher who hated me without any reason. I was a child (6 years old would be 7). During the three years with you as a teacher, I have felt insulted and humiliated. I have never felt such hatred from someone else. To stand in the dunce's corner doing nothing was the punishment for me without a crime. I hade several times been sitting in front of the class next to you and when someone asked (sometimes they didn't wonder what I did there and you just had to tell them what I did there) what I did there, then you said that this seat is for those who can't behave like a human, and those who not doing well and can't listen. - Roonman2yrCommented
change wattpad to webnovel btw
One day I decided to write to my teacher that treated me badly in 3 years. I wrote her a letter in 2014 but still have not sent it to her by uncertainty. December 2016 I was fighting between life and death. And those days I spent in intensive care, I began to think about the meaning of life. And that was when I decided that I should write down what I had written to my teacher, here on Wattpad. My purpose with this is that I want people to know what happened to me when I was a child. And to get other parents to think when it comes to their children. It's not only children who bully children, some adults bully children. And it happened to me. I will write exactly how I wrote to her. - Roonman2yrPosted
I honestly thought this was going to be another reincarnation story so it was refreshing to see that the main character just stayed in heaven instead. I like this idea lol, it's kinda like purgatony on YouTube or good place, other than the fact that those have a more comedic side to them, while this seems a bit more serious. I think the character design of the main character, wanting to commit revenge on bad people from her life, gives a good space for character development thoughout, the direction obviously depends on the author. Anyways good work author, keep it up!!
- Roonman2yrCommented
ohhhh I had a feeling that's what happened
"You are awfully calm for someone who just died", the baby chuckled and started to slowly float towards me. - Roonman2yrReplied to INoNot