BlackJester

boring and too short

What is the point of this fanfiction if it is an exact copy of the original stories?

Excuse me, but it's impossible to read, it feels like I'm reading an essay by an elementary school student, like "He's eating, he's sleeping, they do it to him, so he behaves like this," I mean, the author should work with writing skills,

It's kind of like "My House of Horrors"

It's a great story, everything is perfect here, starting from writing characters and keeping a story[img=Your move][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

Eh, the author, you ruined the story at the very beginning, did you see a one-year-old child?Then you should think about your own stories, it looks like the same child wrote them.No matter how different the world is, the child remains a child, and will not be able to think, talk and walk on his own.If you didn't know yourself, then it was worth listening to the commentators and editing

And so he became a slave to the system, fearing to become a slave to Danzo

to make the op weaker than others, although unlike them, you train and have experience from a previous life, yes why not, let the op get in the face from the nouname in the first sparring

he hides too much, so much that it won't make sense, because I'm sure that in academies he will hide his abilities, which means that he will be mediocre in the eyes of others, which means there will be no point in pouring resources into him in the eyes of others

что Кишимото,что и вы на стороне Саске)