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like i said that's not the problem, the problem is that someone as strong like yuji didn't find ussop on time on this very small island whit yuji speed strength and perception this should not be possible, the problem is whit the explications, feels very forced just for the sake of that situation to happen overall it didn't come natural and feel very forced, that is just how i honestly feel about the chapter.

I have no problem whit the kaya situation, but the explications of way yuji and others let kuro run , and specially why someone as strong as yuiji didn't make it in timp is very weak and overall bad writing, remember this u have a powerful mc whit knowledge of future.

this Luffy should literally one shot enel ,this fight was dragged unnecessarily, what's next struggle to beat rob luci Jesus...

not killing them make this one of the most dumb chapter i ever read in all my Years of reading fanfics.

you need to stop pushing MC in Luffy direction every time , and the whole thing whit garp and the handcuffs it's annoying, so many chapters wasted on this . focus more on MC journey and finding crew mates then this. just my honest opinion this fanfic has potential but is wasted like this.

man, another one when MC join Luffy that's disappointing.

if this is at the beginning of the story , then you made a big mistake whit robin at this timeline she should be whit crocodile for years already.

how is this mc losing at this point in the story whit that status , absolutely ridiculous, even before this he always feels so weak and ordinary what is the point whit this system if ther is no power progression and he always feels weak.

arsenal or Liverpool, Madrid is a big no for me .

I understand what are you saying, but honestly you don't need to keep the same like in real life , it's your story don't be afraid to go crazy whit it ,hope I don't sound like complaining to much i just want to give o honest opinion/advise.