it's about the dangersnof smoking

i edge to your comment everyday

thanks bbg

😝 no

never write again, this sucks so mucu, please.

most random number ever

not the teacher. to other girl that the mc stared at when he was about to entwr the classroom

traditionally katanas were made with iron sand, making them quite brittle but sharp.

i can't tell if this is the author playing to the character or the author self inserting. i hope it isn't a self insert, that would be very sad.

the author should've spent those precious words on this character instead of trying to justify the mc's raging boner for a 16 year old.

well since the author stated the disaster happened around 1980's japan's economy boomed. so it may very well have been called paradise on earth by some.

i don't like the classifications. to childish or cartoony for my taste. they should've been called hunters and criminals or soldiers and criminals. heroes and villains sounds like a game made up by 6 year olds.

virginity is cool stay pure

virginity is cool stay pure

man should've named it Caesar city or Julius city. et tu author-nim

Virginity is cool! Stay pure.

I really enjoyed the first chapter. If i had friends interested in webnovels i would recommend this in a heartbeat. The writing was good, the story was intruiging. The way information and background lore was relayed to the reader was also smooth and good. I am excited for the next chapter and where this story will go.🥰

I do not have many complaints at all. Quite the opposite, i have many praises to give. It was very intruiging and the way you set up the world relayed information to the reader was very smooth. I thoughr the grammar was good, but my opinion concerning grammar shouldn't be taken all that seriously since eenglish is not my first language. You described the characters and enviroments well so it was easy to imagine. I could see some game of thrones inspiration wich i really like. i think you are doing a great job, keep it up. 🥰

The delivery is very dry, a trap i fall into as well. The grammar is decent not like i can complain. However, i cannot stress this enough descriptions are key to creating better immersion. Don't over describe, but to it in good amounts. As for the main character, he seems like a real cliché. The suppossed smart character that grins all the time and is stronger than everyone, every 13 year olds dream. At first when he laughed at his sister or twin, i was beginning to think he might be evil. But no, he was just the cliche anime smart dude that is good at fighting. Okay, here's my last complaint. You do not YOU DO NOT dropkick someones balls. i mean the heck, the balls are low and a drop kick is a drop kick. First of all, you would not want to drop kick in a fight with three dudes wielding bats. when you are on the ground that gives them the oportunity to attack back. that is all, otherwise fairly decent night read.[img=recommend]

decent enough for a bit of light reading instead of sleeping. however i have two critisism of the first chapter. 1. you should more descriptions, say for instance when the keaton guy wakes up. You could have described a sharp pain in his abdomen and then cut to him feeling the blood on the floor and realising he bleed a lot. 2. To much information for the first chapter. otherwise a fairly decent webnovel.[img=update][img=recommend]