arun_karna

I am straight , so this didn't relate to me ............... but it is a good story. i liked the work.......................................................

Heck yah , you have grown a bit jazz. Now don't get me started with the grammar, you have to put the dialogues inside quotations (" "). why do you forgot them?.

Had some parts were i can not understand , so hopefully you work on it. Other than that its a solid story. i am just trying to be honest here- no offence.

talk about bad parenting,

hmh kind a funny , but the heroin seems like a strong person but the male lead is just suking up to her , which is not what i hoped for. lol apart from it ,its good .