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Maleine_Perle2yrCommentedIt's interesting! I noticed that although the text is in past tense, some verbs are in present tense (accompanied the funeral). And you sometimes forget the specifier (covering 'the' area around his eyes; without 'the' slightest scratch). And for the beginning of the text, it should be 'some try their best'; 'in the middle of the road'; 'some laugh'; 'and there are those who fall in the middle of the struggle'
Ch 1 Mother's Love- Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
I imagined a chibi devil Chen YU laughing over his shoulder
The instant he registered the intimate call, Hou Yi's length jerked uncontrollably inside Chen Yu and shot out its burning white fluid, making Chen Yu laugh to death inwardly, even as he showed a surprised look on the surface. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommentedCh 40 Laurel Elysium
- Maleine_Perle2yrReplied to PusangGala
I appreciate how you mixed singular and plural
Hm, suddenly memories popped up of how there had been some cases recorded in which a martial arts practitioner had advanced much more quickly after losing a part of his body. Wouldn't it be interesting for Heavenly Saber Sect to develop a special group of blind cultivators? But it wasn't just their shizhi's looks that might draw these lustful teenagers in, his bell-like voice and delicious smell were too attractive as well. So maybe they should also form teams for those without ears and noses... - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
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Every step was reasonably defensible, every expression exactly proper, but on the side, their true intentions were revealed by the way they had each furtively wrapped one of Ning He's hands around their lengths, guiding it slowly over themselves. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
There's an actual reason for it? Wonder what it is.
In a more theoretical vein, what had caused such a disaster to take place, what could have possibly severed a soul that was strong enough to follow him through each world? An inkling of what might have happened tickled the edges of his mind, but even when the feeling of Wenren ShiShi's bones crunching under his feet notified him of his landing, the impression remained vague. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
Of course you aren't aware, it's not like you're egging her on on purpose~~
Of course, he wasn't aware that standing outside the door and listening to these ambiguous noises was Wenren ShiShi, who had come to invite her shifu to dinner. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
shameless much
Saying so, he slipped Ning He's robe down to expose his exquisitely defined shoulder blades and reflexively pressed his lips against them, then kneaded the fine parts in the youth's delicate neck. Hidden from view, the man planted small marks on the white skin, his eyes lowered to cover the darkness that was roiling with the urge to bite through this nape until he could gnaw on the boy's bones and engrave his mark in the deepest part of him. With these fantasies and the view that he was enjoying, his breathing became heavier and heavier and eventually, he had to conduct the massage with one hand as he was using the other to comfort himself. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
Well when protagonist's backstory comes out, I'm sure a reason for MC's bullying will come out of the brain hole.
To this repudiation, Moqi Baihui merely spit out, "Then if, as you claim, he's so jealous that he can't stand the existence of someone more talented than he is, why didn't he just kill all the geniuses? Or at least cripple them permanently? Why didn't he tell everyone what scum you are earlier, how you tried to burn your peak master's son and also frame him for it? Can you even fathom how much he must have been hurt by your betrayal? Yet he still defended you and gave you a chance to escape blame." - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
That's disappointing; of course all the protagonists suck but here I thought this one was just a bullied kid who blackened and made his bullies suffer more than he did; when clearly it's a vicious kid. If he turns out to be an illegitimate kid of MC's dad or a kid of his dad's white moonlight, I won't be surprised.
And Zhuo Biming showed that he understood reality, recognizing that this was a chance to wash himself clean, he didn't hesitate to agree, "Brother You did go a bit overboard." Seeing that even this relatively mild boy was supporting Ning He's account, the public's outrage fell squarely on the stunned You Daolin, who couldn't understand what had just happened. - Maleine_Perle2yrReplied to Maleine_Perle
*true
Unaware of the turmoil that was sweeping through Chen Yu's brain, the two men who had been ignored sat around him in a wistful mood then, as soon as the sound of Ning He's soft, cute snores assured them that they wouldn't be spotted, they each shot the other a sharp glance and simultaneously stood up to discuss the situation privately. They both knew that various issues had been simmering and had to be resolved. Nevertheless, due to their unwillingness to have the youth out of their sight, the brothers who could only bring themselves to walk a short distance away had to carry on their confrontation in hushed whispers, so that, unable to express their aggressiveness in their tone, in sync, the duplicate faces therefore ridiculously glared at each other instead. - Maleine_Perle2yrReplied to PowerhouseSasuNaru
Oh so ture, for once he will suffer from his own habits and shamelessness!
Unaware of the turmoil that was sweeping through Chen Yu's brain, the two men who had been ignored sat around him in a wistful mood then, as soon as the sound of Ning He's soft, cute snores assured them that they wouldn't be spotted, they each shot the other a sharp glance and simultaneously stood up to discuss the situation privately. They both knew that various issues had been simmering and had to be resolved. Nevertheless, due to their unwillingness to have the youth out of their sight, the brothers who could only bring themselves to walk a short distance away had to carry on their confrontation in hushed whispers, so that, unable to express their aggressiveness in their tone, in sync, the duplicate faces therefore ridiculously glared at each other instead. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
Unanswerable, as in "so shameless it's best to let it stay unknown", right? We know you're into that babe~
Upon reviewing the list of his lover's distinctive traits, Chen Yu mused in passing on why he even tolerated the man, but he swiftly stopped that unanswerable train of thought and continued to examine the even tally, finally falling asleep after vigorously erasing from his mind one scenario that would clarify this mess. Surely, that wasn't possible. Even if it was, he refused to acknowledge it! - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
Did MC's systemgolden finger get rid of the substances?
Obviously the boy, who had known about the hazard posed by this tonic which was reserved for whoever was ranked number one on his peak, had suppressed everyone else in order to take on this poison himself. And in return, he'd had to endure the terrible rumors about him, spread by those ignorant, ungrateful people around him. Moreover, he'd been stoically bearing the reputation of having an average talent when, in reality, to have managed to maintain an 'average' level despite his qi being diverted to his blood indicated that he would have been an outstanding cultivator under normal circumstances. With these thoughts spiraling around in their minds, even as they scolded him for being a foolish child in their hearts, their faces overflowed with regret-tinged tenderness. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
ML's identity is quite unfortunate this time too...
But when Zhuo Biming finally overtook Ning He in his cultivation and eventually seized control of Jade Sword Mountain by killing Ning Taio, he vented thoroughly, spending exactly a decade to meticulously torture Ning He and his minions to death. Afterwards, Zhuo Biming left behind the sect and traveled the jianghu freely, collecting a harem of beautiful little sisters and devoted little brothers to become the most powerful cultivator. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
WHY IS HE SO FOND OF RELATIONSHIPS BETWEEN FAMILY?!!!!!?
As if he sensed the danger, Sun Ri rushed to deny the charge. "No, no, of course not, how could I ever be attracted to anyone except for you? But I did have an idea and it's all set up..." Hng, Chen Yu sneered, what 'all set up,' no doubt he'd pushed it through completely. Unaware that he'd been seen through, Sun Ri continued bravely, "Why don't I adopt you, and then you can be my heir?" - Maleine_Perle2yrReplied to Bluebermm
I've been thinking, maybe ML is watching everything that's happening from somewhere in system space and chuckling at how MC toys with him.
This was exactly what Chen Yu was aiming for, he pretended to consider the proposal then obediently nodded. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
MC, seeing you become more and more dense is nerve-breaking.
Chen Yu hummed in thought. By this point, he'd certainly grasped that the thigh wasn't willing to function correctly as a thigh for the protagonist, so he might as well seize it for himself. As for why Sun Ri had shifted his focus from Guo Ziyue to Xiang Kai, he sneered, hadn't it been from the day he'd performed that bed scene with Shui Re Dian that the 'king' hadn't disdained him? Not having been completely locked down by the protagonist yet, the man had likely been seduced by Xiang Kai's looks, which Chen Yu couldn't help but admire in the mirror himself. - Maleine_Perle2yrCommented
A more appealing?! While yandere male leads are very popular among fujoshis, I don't think it's the right approach for a mainstream audience... Stalker behavior might ring true to you but it's in no way romantic you know.
Not only was the story entertaining, but also, it portrayed a more appealing image of homosexuality than most forms of media did. Something about it simply rang true for him, so that merely reading the words on paper had hooked him, as if he could see it playing out in front of him. This was critical, because even a decade after he had come out in front of the press, an underlying prejudice against his sexual orientation remained for many members of society. Normally, Sun Ri didn't care, seeing as he wasn't dependent on popular opinion for his livelihood anyway. Now, however, he had to prepare for the moment when he would announce that he was a couple with his doll, who was far more sensitive than he appeared, so he had to soften public perception first.