Youve made me obsessed with your novel. Damn you!

Maybe add a last name? More character development?

Delete the Sei.

I know you have a lot of question, but now is not the time. ~I believe would sound much more endangering and cause more interest.

I recommend rewording this paragraph.. It makes the humanoid speech sound like a child which I don’t believe that’s what youre aiming for.

I recommend changing how was to how is. It’ll read more smoothly. Sorry I’ll be posting these comments throughout, once I get my power stones tonight I’ll send them your way. 🤙

Change Best to Vest, so far the story is intriguing so keep up the good work. 👍

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Please release more chapters today, I need more to feel okay.

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Noah?

Never ask mentIon? Remove the ask when ya have the time:)

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Of course, I’ll update my review the more I read.

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Review Change: this webnovel 100% has the capability to stand side by side with the other top webnovels (for example, My Vampire System). the novel has a few grammer mistakes but that doesnt affect the meaning behind the paragraph the author is trying to express. Overall this webnovel is already in my top 10 favorites and i greatly urge new readers to give the webnovel 10 chapters before writing it off and you’ll be hooked. In all honestly, the biggest write off for most is the amount of chapters a webnovel has but if you give this one a chance, you wont regret it. Once the webnovel has a little over 200 chapters, I bet it’ll be a top webnovel as it rightfully deserves. That’s all from me. 🤙

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