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I feel like with how Eva acts around Aurianna is going to get her killed someday by Aurianna.

Okay yeah, I can't read this. No offense, however, the grammar and especially the flow and how the chapters are written make this such a slog to read through, though Grammarly would fix that in a jiffy. The conversations the FL has with herself don't make much sense to a person. It feels like she is improvising up a script on the spot and reading off of that instead of holding conversations properly. It's the same case with the storytelling and descriptions. I recommend reading other well-written novels, seeing how they are written, and learning from them. That could make this novel a hit.

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