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kinda weird thing to say when he just got his memories. Author needs to stay consistent.
Tenkaichi: Nihon Saikyou Bugeisha Ketteisen
The plan -
Ethereal Eye -
What Karn sees now -
What Karn sees -
100-70 = 30 coins how author mess up simple math
Attention to detail I like but there is a reason Main characters need to have an ambition that the reader would like to see. People to like to have an overarching idea of where the story is going when reading and the MC for this story has zero ambition which means the reader has no idea what the main goal of this whole story is. Im around chapter 60 now and the Main character just wants to laze around and do nothing but is at the same time super serious about his work as a Judge which would make a cool side character but as a main character the story feels cheapened cuz of lack of ambition leaving the reader confused on the point of this story. i.e. Naruto has the ambition of being the hokage, luffy the ambition of being the pirate king now imagine naruto doesn't have that goal the story is just super lackluster. This can be mitigated like in bleach with certain enemies being the focal point to defeat so life can go back as normal but there is a reason bleach is always considered worse than naruto and one piece for a reason it is cuz ichigo does not have any sort of ambition and that is important for the reader to be invested in. If the main character wanted to become the greatest judge which was a title given in the universe that would mean I have something to look forward to and learn more about the universe thru world building which is well done in this novel. If the main character realized an ambition this novel would have been a much better read but going thru case by case feels like chore to me with no overarching goal in mind rather than something I enjoyed.