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Elliott_Morreau

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    Elliott_Morreau1yr
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    overall I like it. besides the POV shift, and a little bit of me wanting more detail on the big epic overhead of the 'world' it's well written good job!

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    I would love to know the prominent features. Is there a gigantic city that tower over a mountain? a prominent figure at the top of a hill? A cliff face?

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    Elliott_Morreau1yr
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    I like the introduction so far, but this paragraph is a POV shift.

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    Elliott_Morreau2yr
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    thanks!

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