Gold snakes or gold bracelets made into snakes also represent fertility in some cultures, especially Rome ey?

So the kid has Rh-Null?

The only pokemon they don't eat are the human looking ones, fairies, pokemon that don't even have flesh, bug types probably, and most dragons, also ghosts. Everything animal like will and is eaten in pokemon just like we do. Sorry to burst your innocent childhood memories... But the whalmer industry flourishes in any world, blubber is ludicrously profitable.

My God is the MC dumb... When you give a character a disability it means that he won't be overpowered, you make him struggle and have the fights balanced and flow easy. But no, there is little of that; afterall overpowered MCs are easy to write cause they are easy, even if the author is horrible at executing a good one. The plot holes are making me jump off a cliff. All in all, a story that could've been special, but the author wasn't up to it.

Neutral lightning? Wouldn't that just be normal lightning?...

For the team rocket book, a gun would obviously be better and will give you the direct advantage in any human confrontation, while a knife means you have to get up close, which is impossible due to pokemon. A knife is even more useless if the enemy proves to be psychic

No harem, or I will eat your dog, your cat, and probably your neighbour's pet fish ................................................................................................................................

You do realize that geography isnt about rocks right? I'm guessing you might be younger then. Cause funny enough mineralogy and it's related fields arent a normal class, sure maybe an elective in some schools but definitely not the norm. (P.s. geography in highschool is about countries, cultures, and it's related histories, as well as environmental factors in relation to humanity, not about some random rocks and their properties.)

I know this is late, but you know that parallel worlds means worlds parallel to your own right? For an example dragon ball and say warhammer are different worlds and in almost no way parallel to eachother. The term 'parallel worlds' is oftenly used loosely and incorrectly to describe other worlds.

I'm confused, he gets the Assassin template but buys a sword, not a short-sword but a longsword. And longswords are not beginner weapons, they are very expensive compared to weapons that would be much more useful to an assassin like a dagger, tomahawk, or a short-sword. If the MC is so weak, then why is he single handedly able to hold back a hichurl by his mouth, while single handedly slicing the hichurls neck when practically laying against it? Not to mention the hilichurl doesnt fight back when it can easily overpower MC, and especially when its arms and legs arent constrained, not to mention he doesnt even have his sword equipped when "holding" it by the mouth. It's not possible unless he has a few dozen more joints in his arm, and actual strength.

Diablos is a herbivore though? They primarily eat cactus and arent hunters at all. The noios only use diablos as a defensive mechanism when feeling threatened, the screams only annoy and shock the diablos like a dog whistle, forcing them to go to the source, or jump up like a fish

How the mighty have fallen, I used to be a great fan of your stories, the characters while not perfect; were still fluid. In this novel though? Not so much sadly... From funny guy writing good stories to an angry moderator who cant take criticism. I used to look forward to your posts, but not anymore, to say I'm disappointed is barely scraping the surface of your newfound ignorance. If you wished to stay at the top, than you shouldn't have insulted fans, readers, and reviewers over criticism, constructive or not. They compare it to a chinese translation because everything feels forced and generic, where they find pleasure in such writing; the western audience (your main audience) does not enjoy stiff humanoids having stiff actions with stiff brains. And knowing your previous stories, I know that you like cultivation, but that doesnt mean you should take the writing styles as ques and inspiration, when the more experienced writers and readers of your main audience are opposed to the repetitive and almost robotic like nature of generic chinese story writing, even worse when it feels and sounds like a translation.

When having the character monologue, especially from Dan's point of view, use apostrophes to differentiate them from active dialogue.

Man it's been a while since I've been on webnovel, and seeing the chapter count (which I cant fathom reading) I've decided to ask the real question to make up my absence. You may not remember me, but still; did the Beedrill horde come into existence?

Yes, I know, everybody knows, that's just part of constructive criticism and a learning curve to help new authors with grammar and english in general. What's your point?

Plot twist: fabrin is actually rykard, lord of blasphemy

Go damnit this took 30 minutes to write and its 3 in the morning

Quinn:

Some advice, many of the chapters felt off and amateurish (no offense) and I couldnt find out why until I realized, the transitions in between words, sentences, and actions could do better. Vocabulary could be updated, and some sentence structure is redundant like 'it is' which could be effectively shortened or just changed in general

If he doesnt grab a metal gear than hes maidenless