SomeLordsBastard

You are asking for patreon for this? Do you have a conscience?

I wont say its illegible but I skipped most of the prologue to find when GOT starts.

I understand fixing grammar but adding unnecessary details just ruins it. There is beauty in saying a lot with the least amount of words. When too much is said it takes away the impact.

There is too much AI. The prologue is too long for my taste. Don't give up and put more effort in your writing. You can do it.

The word of the King, Tywin and Starks is not enough for everyone?

Why would he tell how fast he can make it to everyone? If he can break Ice that is advertisement enough. Just inflate the price of materials and time. Rarity is what makes something expensive.

I would like to see you move those repeated lines to the synopsis so my tts doesn't read them aloud twice a chapter.

I read your danmachi novel and was big fan and I don't know why you changed your writing style in this novel.

It's hard for me to get into this cause I didn't really care for fallout. There is something about the MC that irritates me too. It's hard not for me to see this as a worse version of Blood and Iron. I will hold my judgement though and let you cook.

Pros Fast pacing. Entertaining. Enough human feel. Cons AI quirks still obvious. focuses too much on game mechanics. (that may be a positive for you) Conclusion After 14 chapters, I am still going to read. I am hoping there is going to be a plot because there is none now and its too early to judge. I can only go off what I read so far and my intuition. Feels like a light read. Try it yourself. Anyone who thinks a 3 is awful can write their own review praising it like a north korean