I would suggest Aphrodite as the love interest, a goddess of love that doesn’t cheat would be a breath of fresh air for once. And it would be a refreshing change from the usual Hestia, Athena trope that keeps repeating itself.

What I saw broke me, the love my life was sharing her bed with another man. ~~~ And then describe the anguish etc. You don’t have to describe everything especially this as it will drive tones of readers away. By going this route, Mc doesn’t see her in the act but the message that she was seeing someone else is clear as she is sleeping in bed with another man. Hope this helps as I truly want this story to keep going but know that you’ll receive an immense amount of hate for this.

Story is pretty good the Harry Potter incorporation is truly great well done to the author on that front. Only problem I have with the story is Chapter 17 after Mc suffered an insuferable amount of trials to reunite with his lover, he finds her in the act with another man. Something rather normal as he was believed to be dead for thousands of years but the fact that the author decided to flesh out the s*x scene when Mc x Rebeccah s*x scene was left to readers imagination left to be desired. It makes me believe either the author enjoys seeing Mc suffer or is a c*ck. I truly despised that chapter and would recommend anyone reading this story to completely skip it. As it is simple cause for unecessary heart ache. But a scene doesn’t define a story as a whole so the story is still worth reading as long as you skip/rush over chapter 17.

Bro the worse is the legit description of the betrayal you can simply allude to it no need to describe the s*x scene. Literally made me boil with rage.

This story is getting better and better great job author 👍 Liking the direction this is taking so far.

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He learned future sight? I thought he only knew normal observation?

Most fitting one in my opinion, as Roger crew was called Roger Pirates. So like father like son type of thing.

The appropriate word would be “tyrant” : a cruel and oppressive ruler.

Is it normal that I can’t find any chapter? When I open the sheo.bio I find myself in a blog. With the 3 following articles. Your First Story Will Fail, and It’s Alright. The 7 Best Dogs in Fiction Video Games Got Worse? And a discord link. No menu tab or research tab to get to the chapters of the story in question.

Yeah now Mc is plain evil, I saw a documentary once where a girl had survived her kidnapping even after the horrible things done to her she still managed to heal and live a normal life. So yeah Mc killing a vicitm of abuse like that is out of character for what you portrayed so far.

I personnaly hate reading R rated scenes, just hint to it and skip it like in movies or tv shows. If someone wants R rated content there’s plenty available on film.

Great f***ing story, barely any grammatical errors with good pacing so far. (5 chapters)

I don’t understand where people are coming from when complaining about the grammar. It’s better than 99% of what’s found in this website. I think the story is great, author takes the time to describe and give proper details to the events. Making the story a bit slow paced but I like it that way. Great read so far, definitely recommend.